I believe you have a strong connection with this character and it showed in the passion with which you delivered their lines. Very nicely done! I did take notes on anything that I caught while listening to your fine performance:
05:28 "Thou art the spring / That I used to pine for," [missing That]
05:34 "My heart hailed thee friend" [read as: "My heart hailed thee as friend"]
07:34 "And ere now thy glowing / Eye have I seen: [read as "And ere now thy glowing / Eye I have seen:"]
08:10 "The name of thy father was Wölfe?" [I do think that the 'W' in Wölfe should be pronounced as a 'V' in English]
13:27 "From off the field" [read as "Far off the field"]
I suppose the one at 5:34 alters the meaning a bit. I'll leave it to you decide which of the others you want to address. When you upload your revision please let me know which you edited so that I'll know where to focus for spot PL.
Thank you.
I have fixed 5:28 and 5:34
but I am having a hard time matching tone in the last three, I feel like they are better as they are than with a clearly inserted later line.
I left those as they are, but can try again tm to redo those if you would like
I believe you have a strong connection with this character and it showed in the passion with which you delivered their lines. Very nicely done! I did take notes on anything that I caught while listening to your fine performance:
05:28 "Thou art the spring / That I used to pine for," [missing That]
05:34 "My heart hailed thee friend" [read as: "My heart hailed thee as friend"]
07:34 "And ere now thy glowing / Eye have I seen: [read as "And ere now thy glowing / Eye I have seen:"]
08:10 "The name of thy father was Wölfe?" [I do think that the 'W' in Wölfe should be pronounced as a 'V' in English]
13:27 "From off the field" [read as "Far off the field"]
I suppose the one at 5:34 alters the meaning a bit. I'll leave it to you decide which of the others you want to address. When you upload your revision please let me know which you edited so that I'll know where to focus for spot PL.
Thank you.
I have fixed 5:28 and 5:34
but I am having a hard time matching tone in the last three, I feel like they are better as they are than with a clearly inserted later line.
I left those as they are, but can try again tm to redo those if you would like
Glad you enjoyed it. I really liked the "What big teeth you have Grandma" moment - wonder if Red Riding Hood author or Wagner came first; who stole from who?
