Yet again you save me from myself.
Thank you! Todd
Yet again you save me from myself.
Kitty wrote: ↑February 23rd, 2024, 5:36 amyes ! Conway is great, such a good friend, but also explosive when feeling slighted. All these nuances are well actedAllenO wrote: ↑February 22nd, 2024, 5:57 pmConway is ready for PL.
https://librivox.org/uploads/toddhw/townbeforeyou_conway_1.mp3 3:06
https://librivox.org/uploads/toddhw/townbeforeyou_conway_2.mp3 2:47
https://librivox.org/uploads/toddhw/townbeforeyou_conway_3.mp3 1:56
https://librivox.org/uploads/toddhw/townbeforeyou_conway_4.mp3 1:27
https://librivox.org/uploads/toddhw/townbeforeyou_conway_5.mp3 2:16
Acts 1, 3 and 5 are straight PL ok.
A few suggestions for improving the other two acts:
Act 2:
> at 0:14: (p. 34) "it is she" - you say "it is thee"
> at 2:08: (p. 36) "Oh that saves my life. And where is he now ?" - I would suggest saying the first line as the aside and the second aloud, because she is replying to his second question and the first was not meant for her ears to not give his love away easily. Often in old scripts the word "aside" comes after the quote it refers to.
> at 2:15: (p. 36) "but if you should not love me, I should die" - maybe the emphasis is best put on "me" (also in italics in the text) because he replies to the fact that another man got over her so quickly, but he won't
Act 4:
> at 1:00: (p. 59) "what grace can dignity of soul bestow" - you say "foul" which doesn't really make sense here
> at 1:03: (p. 59) "the very conduct which..." -you say "conduit"
thanks
Sonia
perfect edits and PL ok now, thank you Allen ! See you in another play soon I hopeAllenO wrote: ↑February 23rd, 2024, 10:38 amAwesome feedback as always, Sonia. I made the changes to Acts II and IV.
https://librivox.org/uploads/toddhw/townbeforeyou_conway_2.mp3 2:47
https://librivox.org/uploads/toddhw/townbeforeyou_conway_4.mp3 1:26
Thank you very much, Sonia!Kitty wrote: ↑February 23rd, 2024, 6:09 am brilliantly naughty and frivolous, Jenn, excellently done love to hear more from her. Thanks
Act 1 is PL ok.
One cut for Act 2:
> at 4:38: (p. 36) repeat "Yes I pitied him, because I could not love him" - is there one version you prefer, then maybe cut out the other
aww she sounds so young and carefree, a bit malicious, but nobody can be mad at her. Lovely acted, Jenn, thanks.jennlea wrote: ↑February 24th, 2024, 8:11 pmNo idea why I repeated the line but I cut one of them here:
https://librivox.org/uploads/toddhw/townbeforeyou_georgina_2.mp3
And here is the rest of her:
https://librivox.org/uploads/toddhw/townbeforeyou_georgina_3.mp3
https://librivox.org/uploads/toddhw/townbeforeyou_georgina_4.mp3
https://librivox.org/uploads/toddhw/townbeforeyou_georgina_5.mp3
Thanks for catching that! Here is the line added: