[FULL][DR] A Fourth Form Friendship by Angela Brazil - rap

Post by **Rapunzelina** » March 25th, 2024, 1:27 pm

Thank you for the feedback, M!

I have uploaded Chapter 2, I used a "without" from another sentence, hopefully it sounds smooth enough.

mleigh · Post by **mleigh** » March 25th, 2024, 6:37 pm

Rapunzelina wrote: ↑March 25th, 2024, 1:27 pm Thank you for the feedback, M!

I have uploaded Chapter 2, I used a "without" from another sentence, hopefully it sounds smooth enough.

It sounds perfectly natural. Chapter 2 is now PL OK.

Thanks,

mleigh · Post by **mleigh** » March 25th, 2024, 6:38 pm

Chapter 5 is PL OK.

Thanks,

M

victoriaalicebell · Post by **victoriaalicebell** » March 26th, 2024, 10:05 am

I've finally finished the narrator chapter 6.

victoriaalicebell · Post by **victoriaalicebell** » March 26th, 2024, 10:52 am

Chapter 7 is in too!

Post by **Rapunzelina** » March 29th, 2024, 4:27 am

victoriaalicebell wrote: ↑March 26th, 2024, 10:05 am I've finally finished the narrator chapter 6.

Well done!

Just a few PL notes:
0:42 missing line "cried the purser, coming round at this critical moment to collect the fares, and holding out his hand in anticipation."
4:29 phrase sounds cut-off "where the cliffs were of a different geological formation"
5:15 word substitution "carry some specimens back to the Grange" read as species.
6:07 phrase sounds cut-off "and investigating such a number of species, that the other girls began"
13:50 missing line "she cried, shaking them eagerly."
missing "End of Chapter 6"

Post by **Rapunzelina** » April 10th, 2024, 4:13 pm

victoriaalicebell wrote: ↑March 26th, 2024, 10:52 am Chapter 7 is in too!

PL notes:

this is optional, at 7:43 the word "sang-froid" has French roots and it's best pronounced as "san-frwa"

at 15:07, missing "English communication"