PL OKdarman210 wrote: ↑December 8th, 2023, 8:52 amI just fixed section 3 by removing the extra "done". (12-8-23)PaulWelford wrote: ↑October 17th, 2023, 2:54 am Hi there
I just realised you had a heap of sections for PL. Sorry. Working thru them now.
They are all great readings.
Sections 0 -2 are all PL OK.
Section 3, Misery, has an extra "done" included at 0:44. It's pretty minor as you say it so fast it hardly affects the rhythm but I thought I'd let you know in case you want to correct it.
Also - a suggestion, these sections are extremely short, I think too short as the standard LV stuff at start and end takes up a disproportionate amount of time compared to the poems. I'd suggest merging them into one or a few sections instead.
Paul
[SOLO/POETRY] Fine Clothes to the Jew by Langston Hughes - tg
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I heard it that time, just fixed it!PaulWelford wrote: ↑December 8th, 2023, 11:36 amI hear ‘that’ clearly already. To me it sounds like:darman210 wrote: ↑December 8th, 2023, 8:56 am- I only heard the word "done" once. At 0:54, I said ".. that done me wrong". My midwestern accent/drawl might have made "that" and "done" sound like the same word, lol.PaulWelford wrote: ↑October 17th, 2023, 3:01 am Section 4, Suicide, also has an extra "done" at 0:54
Should I articulate that section to make both words stand out?
‘Shall I carve myself, or that man that done done me wrong?’
But if you disagree I’m not going to make a big deal. As with the other one it’s fairly minor and quickly said so doesn’t disturb the rhythm.
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Great. Fabulous reading. As I requested before, please can you change the status in the MW to ‘ready for spot PL’ when you make changes in response to PL notes?darman210 wrote: ↑December 21st, 2023, 10:06 amI heard it that time, just fixed it!PaulWelford wrote: ↑December 8th, 2023, 11:36 amI hear ‘that’ clearly already. To me it sounds like:
‘Shall I carve myself, or that man that done done me wrong?’
But if you disagree I’m not going to make a big deal. As with the other one it’s fairly minor and quickly said so doesn’t disturb the rhythm.
Sorry about that. I missed that message earlier.PaulWelford wrote: ↑December 21st, 2023, 1:21 pmGreat. Fabulous reading. As I requested before, please can you change the status in the MW to ‘ready for spot PL’ when you make changes in response to PL notes?darman210 wrote: ↑December 21st, 2023, 10:06 amI heard it that time, just fixed it!PaulWelford wrote: ↑December 8th, 2023, 11:36 am
I hear ‘that’ clearly already. To me it sounds like:
‘Shall I carve myself, or that man that done done me wrong?’
But if you disagree I’m not going to make a big deal. As with the other one it’s fairly minor and quickly said so doesn’t disturb the rhythm.
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Section 12
1) please update the MW to Ready for PL and make a post when you upload
2) you’ve added the word big twice, once at each occurrence of ‘that would be a surprise’. 00:31 and 00:49
The end 5 seconds has a clock or metronome but should be silent
1) please update the MW to Ready for PL and make a post when you upload
2) you’ve added the word big twice, once at each occurrence of ‘that would be a surprise’. 00:31 and 00:49
The end 5 seconds has a clock or metronome but should be silent
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Section 13
The first line should be
Her face is pale
But I hear
Her lips are pale
The first line should be
Her face is pale
But I hear
Her lips are pale
Corrected: I removed the word "big" from both spots and marked this section as 'ready for PL".PaulWelford wrote: ↑December 22nd, 2023, 12:22 pm Section 12
1) please update the MW to Ready for PL and make a post when you upload
2) you’ve added the word big twice, once at each occurrence of ‘that would be a surprise’. 00:31 and 00:49
The end 5 seconds has a clock or metronome but should be silent
Correction: I changed it to "her lips are pale" and marked this section as '"ready for PL".PaulWelford wrote: ↑December 22nd, 2023, 12:26 pm Section 13
The first line should be
Her face is pale
But I hear
Her lips are pale
Title added at 0:25, marked as "ready for PL"PaulWelford wrote: ↑October 17th, 2023, 3:20 am In Section 10, Brass Spitoons, you don't mention the title at the start.
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The voice correction is good thanks but the metronome is still there.darman210 wrote: ↑January 2nd, 2024, 10:15 amCorrected: I removed the word "big" from both spots and marked this section as 'ready for PL".PaulWelford wrote: ↑December 22nd, 2023, 12:22 pm Section 12
1) please update the MW to Ready for PL and make a post when you upload
2) you’ve added the word big twice, once at each occurrence of ‘that would be a surprise’. 00:31 and 00:49
The end 5 seconds has a clock or metronome but should be silent
Also - the method is to mark it as ready for PL when you first post a file but then it’s ‘ready for spot PL’ when you post a correction. Meaning I don’t need to listen to the whole file again, just the spot where it’s corrected. As your files are so short it’s not a big deal but it’s worth using the correct method.
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PL OKdarman210 wrote: ↑January 2nd, 2024, 10:16 amCorrection: I changed it to "her lips are pale" and marked this section as '"ready for PL".PaulWelford wrote: ↑December 22nd, 2023, 12:26 pm Section 13
The first line should be
Her face is pale
But I hear
Her lips are pale
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PL OKdarman210 wrote: ↑January 3rd, 2024, 11:24 amTitle added at 0:25, marked as "ready for PL"PaulWelford wrote: ↑October 17th, 2023, 3:20 am In Section 10, Brass Spitoons, you don't mention the title at the start.
- Metronome removed (copied and pasted 5 secs of silence from earlier in the recording).PaulWelford wrote: ↑December 21st, 2023, 1:21 pmGreat. Fabulous reading. As I requested before, please can you change the status in the MW to ‘ready for spot PL’ when you make changes in response to PL notes?darman210 wrote: ↑December 21st, 2023, 10:06 amI heard it that time, just fixed it!PaulWelford wrote: ↑December 8th, 2023, 11:36 am
I hear ‘that’ clearly already. To me it sounds like:
‘Shall I carve myself, or that man that done done me wrong?’
But if you disagree I’m not going to make a big deal. As with the other one it’s fairly minor and quickly said so doesn’t disturb the rhythm.
-Saw the "ready for Spot PL" note and corrected it, sorry about that.
- Ready for Spot PL at 1:07PaulWelford wrote: ↑October 17th, 2023, 3:10 am I think you mis-pronounced a word five times in the last verse of section 7 Po' Boy Blues. If it was just the way you say it I'd leave it alone (per LV rules) but in the last / sixth instance you pronounce it correctly. The correct word is weary but I hear reary.
-Last verse was re-recorded. I tried have over-pronounced the word as "wee-ry" so it didn't sound like "rear-ee".
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The metronome was in section 12 but you’ve tagged the PL notes for section 4. This would be irrelevant except that the end of 12 now has a more intrusive clicking noise than before so I’m concerned that you’ve mixed up the files in reality as well as in the PL notes.darman210 wrote: ↑January 8th, 2024, 11:33 am- Metronome removed (copied and pasted 5 secs of silence from earlier in the recording).PaulWelford wrote: ↑December 21st, 2023, 1:21 pmGreat. Fabulous reading. As I requested before, please can you change the status in the MW to ‘ready for spot PL’ when you make changes in response to PL notes?
-Saw the "ready for Spot PL" note and corrected it, sorry about that.