[COMPLETE][Short stories]The Black Cat Vol. 01 No. 01 October 1895 - kit

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Post by huldaheath » January 11th, 2020, 12:20 pm

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Post by Kitty » January 11th, 2020, 12:22 pm

huldaheath wrote:
January 11th, 2020, 12:20 pm
Here goes Section 5.

Length 16:51
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yay, thank you Hulda. I was eagerly awaiting a new story in here.

I will listen to this now, stay tuned for feedback :)

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Post by Kitty » January 11th, 2020, 12:57 pm

huldaheath wrote:
January 11th, 2020, 12:20 pm
Here goes Section 5.
ok I listened to it all and it was a great story. I was expecting that the girl was a ghost in the end, but there I got a bit disappointed :lol: but not every story must be supernatural. The cow and calf were quite some devils though :shock: Interesting section.

Now to your reading, it was lovely to listen to. Your quiet, almost husky voice was so fitting for this story and your accent may even be from that area (although I'm not a specialist in accents). But it sounds very southern States to me. It was an excellent debut. :clap: Congrats on your first PL ok section. Many more to come hopefully. (maybe even in the next Black Cat :mrgreen: )

Now I have a few notes still, but they are not necessary to correct. Just a few tips for next time maybe.

> at the beginning you started a bit abruptly, we recommend leaving at least 0.5 and not more than 1 second before starting the intro disclaimer.
> after the title and author of the story you leave 2.2 seconds of silence, this feels a bit long for a listener who is eager to start the story. ;) Anything over 2 seconds is very long, I would recommend not exceeding 1.5 seconds. But tastes vary there of course.

So: excellent debut, thank you so much. I hope you loved the recording process and that we will hear many more stories from you. You are a wonderful narrator. :)

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Post by huldaheath » January 11th, 2020, 2:08 pm

Sonia, thanks so much for the feedback, and for very helpful encouragement behind the scenes as well. I've reuploaded section 5 with the suggested timing adjustments since they were a quick fix in the beginning of the file, I hope that is ok after already receiving a "PL ok"?
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January 11th, 2020, 12:57 pm
ok I listened to it all and it was a great story. I was expecting that the girl was a ghost in the end, but there I got a bit disappointed :lol: but not every story must be supernatural. The cow and calf were quite some devils though :shock: Interesting section.
No idea if a southern US accent is appropriate for a 19th century Iowan, but it sure is hard to tell a story about a cowgirl without one! I, too, was disappointed by the lack of supernatural twist. But once I got over that, I came to like the story for its wholesomeness. Interestingly enough, while researching how on earth to pronounce the author's last name I found that Harold Kinsabby and Barnes Macgreggor are both pseudonyms of the magazine's editor, H. D. Umbstaetter.

Looking forward to contributing on the next installment of The Black Cat, having a lovely time so far! :)

File duration: 16:50
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Post by Kitty » January 11th, 2020, 2:42 pm

Hi again
I've reuploaded section 5 with the suggested timing adjustments since they were a quick fix in the beginning of the file, I hope that is ok after already receiving a "PL ok"?
oh you didn't have to reupload just for this bit, as the rest was fine. But ok, I checked it once more and yes, the pauses are more agreeable now ;)

Well...usually indeed, our procedure is not to reupload once you got the PL ok. It makes unnecessary work for all involved and the DPL has to recheck to see if the file is correct again. But here it was only a small detail so it was quickly checked. And if ever you reupload, always tell the DPL exactly what you changed, with time stamp and all. At least they can find the spot to correct faster that way.

All is well here, not to worry :) I can see you are eager to get it right ;) But it was a small thing, I didn't want to be too picky for your first section, so I just wanted to mention it for further uses.
No idea if a southern US accent is appropriate for a 19th century Iowan
:hmm: why Iowan ? They were in Colorado if I remember correctly.
I found that Harold Kinsabby and Barnes Macgreggor are both pseudonyms of the magazine's editor, H. D. Umbstaetter.
yes ! I noticed that too in my initial researches :lol: I thought how cheeky that he puts in three stories of himself under different names ;) Well maybe in the first edition they didn't have enough good submissions to include so he had to come up with some stories to fill the paper.
Looking forward to contributing on the next installment of The Black Cat, having a lovely time so far! :)
great ! I'll be posting the link to the new project in here as soon as it's up, so stay bookmarked to the thread ;) I guess I will still wait for one more story to come in, then I'll launch the next one.

So excited. Have a nice weekend still

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Post by huldaheath » January 11th, 2020, 4:03 pm

Kitty wrote:
January 11th, 2020, 2:42 pm
Well...usually indeed, our procedure is not to reupload once you got the PL ok. It makes unnecessary work for all involved and the DPL has to recheck to see if the file is correct again. But here it was only a small detail so it was quickly checked. And if ever you reupload, always tell the DPL exactly what you changed, with time stamp and all. At least they can find the spot to correct faster that way.
Oof I did not think that through - thank you again for rechecking the file, I'll bear this in mind for the future! :oops:
:hmm: why Iowan ? They were in Colorado if I remember correctly.
Ah right you are, but our cowgirl came to Colorado after graduating from Iowa Wesleyan University. Now that you mention it, that's all she really says, so she could be from anywhere. :idea: lol I thought this smiley was supposed to be a surprised cyclops but I guess it's a light bulb.
yes ! I noticed that too in my initial researches :lol: I thought how cheeky that he puts in three stories of himself under different names ;) Well maybe in the first edition they didn't have enough good submissions to include so he had to come up with some stories to fill the paper.
I imagine so! It does come off rather cheeky :lol:
great ! I'll be posting the link to the new project in here as soon as it's up, so stay bookmarked to the thread ;) I guess I will still wait for one more story to come in, then I'll launch the next one.
Awesome, can't wait! Thanks for all the great work you do around here! <3 <3 <3
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Post by Kitty » January 12th, 2020, 2:16 am

huldaheath wrote:
January 11th, 2020, 4:03 pm
Ah right you are, but our cowgirl came to Colorado after graduating from Iowa Wesleyan University.
ok you're right, I forgot about that bit. Yes, this may point that she was from Iowa. But maybe she has adopted the accent of her neighbours now in all those years :lol:
:idea: lol I thought this smiley was supposed to be a surprised cyclops but I guess it's a light bulb.
yes I think it is, but now that you mention it, I see a cyclops too :mrgreen:

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Post by JulieB3 » January 13th, 2020, 3:22 pm


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Post by Kitty » January 14th, 2020, 1:57 am

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January 13th, 2020, 3:22 pm
Here is Section 4.
Length: 28:46
https://librivox.org/uploads/kitty/blackcat01011895_4_various_128.mp3
wow, Julie, thank you so much for this brilliantly narrated breath-taking story. :9: The story itself was quite gripping, but your narration really had me hooked. And I loved the reading in character you did, especially with little nervous Miss Wood in the beginning of her story.

Pacing is also excellent, not too fast, not too slow, everything is fine and can be marked PL ok straight away.

The only thing you need to be careful about in future is the file-naming for each project. Here you forgot to include "oct" between the numbers. You can always find an example on how to name the files correctly in the first post of each project. The safest way is to simply copy/paste the example and change the section number.

Since you have no other errors though, there is no need to reupload the section again. I can change the name in my folder and I made a note to myself so I won't forget.

Congrats on your first really long section. I see you gained first experience with some short poems, but this story was really long already for a beginner. You can be proud of the result.

Thanks, and I hope I'll hear you soon again in one of our projects. :)

Now only waiting for one more story to come in, but I think I will prepare the next volume now ;)

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Post by JulieB3 » January 14th, 2020, 3:34 am

Thank you so much. I'll be more cautious on the file naming. I tried to be very conscientious about it, but the brain and the eyes often see different things.
Congrats on your first really long section. I see you gained first experience with some short poems, but this story was really long already for a beginner. You can be proud of the result.
I didn't realize it was that long until I saw the times on the other sections, but I'm glad I read this section. It was quite fun. Can't wait for the next volume.

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Post by Kitty » January 14th, 2020, 3:37 am

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January 14th, 2020, 3:34 am
Can't wait for the next volume.
:9: will launch this afternoon or tomorrow at the latest. I'll post the link here when it's up, so stay tuned ;)

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Post by Kitty » January 14th, 2020, 6:44 am

Announcement:

The new project is launched. 8 stories waiting for readers. :)

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Post by NarratorJ » January 16th, 2020, 8:29 am

feedback / constructive criticism appreciated

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Post by Kitty » January 16th, 2020, 9:59 am

hello J :9: the one last section we were all waiting for :lol: and what a great ending to this magazine ! The story was really gripping, I was constantly wondering what's the mystery of that coin. :shock: The ending wasn't supernatural, but totally cool nevertheless. A really interesting story. And wonderfully narrated by you, so thank you for that.

I see you already volunteered for the next edition, yay again.

That said, I have one request concerning the quite lengthy pauses in your reading. Anything over 2 seconds feels very long for a listener, who wants to "get going" in the story. I personally feel like getting thrown out of the story when the breaks are too long. I'm not saying you need to rush through, I also love to have pauses to assimilate what is being said, but 2 seconds is too long. Would you mind trimming all those parts that are over 2 seconds by at least half a second ? I noted them all down for you, to make it easier for you. And as a helpful suggestion: start at the end and work your way up to the beginning, that way all my timestamps stay the same for you ;) Otherwise you will soon have trouble finding the spots.

And there is only one single textual error which I think needs correction:

> at 6:07: (p. 44) "which had left for Cleveland at 3:15" - you say "8:15" but considering the timeline it has to be between midnight and 5 in the morning, since this is when it all happens, so 8 is really a wrong time. Otherwise I wouldn't have mentioned it, but here it is important I think for a coherent timeline

and here the pauses that need trimming:

0:23-0:25 / 0:38-0:41 / 1:09-1:11 / 1:45-1:47 / 2:04-2:06 / 2:27-2:29 / 3:01-3:03 / 3:54-3:57 / 4:26-4:28 / 5:28-5:30 / 5:51-5:53 / 6:09-6:11 / 6:23-6:25 / 6:48-6:50 / 7:13-7:15 / 7:52-7:54 / 10:13-10:16 / 10:42-10:44 / 11:28-11:30 / 12:05-12:07 / 13:22-13:24 / 14:29-14:31 / 15:50-15:52 / 17:03-17:05 / 18:31-18:33 / 19:13-19:16 / 19:40-19:42 / 19:57-19:59 / 20:29-20:31 / 21:29-21:31 / 21:49-21:51 / 21:56-21:58

thank you so much. I really like your reading and I'm happy to have you in the next edition as well :)

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Post by NarratorJ » January 16th, 2020, 10:48 am

Thanks for the feedback, especially the detailed timestamps, I'll get this fixed up and re-upload as soon as I can.
feedback / constructive criticism appreciated

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