Very nice work with Mrs. Pampinelli! You've given her just the right characterization. A sure-minded woman who always knows what right, for herself and everyone else around her.
This is a huge role, and you're doing well!
There are quite a lot of notes, but don't worry. Most of them are about spacing. Remember to leave a good amount of space every time your line is interrupted by stage directions. There are also many times where you left too much
space. I didn't mention them below, because it's very easy for Todd to work with too much space, but difficult if there's not enough. What I like to do after recording a role is to copy a space of about 3 seconds, then go through the script again, pasting that space in between each one my lines. This way, I know it's always even.
0:07 You missed your first line: "You see how considerate I am of you, Jenny, letting myself in?"
1:24 OPTIONAL: I'm not sure whether you may have applied some kind of effect to this line, or if maybe you turned your head away from the microphone for a moment, but at the words "gems of talent the unfathomed caves of matrimony bear," your voice suddenly sounds muffled. You may wish to re-record this line (up to you), but even if you don't, see if you can figure out what caused that uneven sound so that you can avoid it in the future.
1:54 More space after "Mr. Spindler"
3:04 There is a kind of bumping/thumping underneath this whole line: "And is going to succeed, too, aren’t you, Mr. Spindler?" This should be re-recorded, please.
4:31 More space after "...so upset me."
4:38 More space after "...his wife's part."
5:14 More space after "...too much to expect of her."
5:23 More space after "I thought of that too."
6:11 More space after "perfectly gorgeous, dear."
7:32 Missing line: "Well, personally, Mr. Ritter, I have always felt that, where it is a question of talent, one should not allow himself to be deterred by purely personal considerations."
7:59 More space after "...on page twelve."
9:17 False start here, followed by a click: "Oh, good evening Mr.--"
9:46 Missed line: "Teddy!"
12:06 and 12:08 More space before and after "intuitive."
12:14 OPTIONAL pronunciation note: "that I had intuitively anticipated the occurrence
of some obstacle to thwart me." Occurrence is stressed on the second syllable, never the first. But pronunciation is always an optional note. I mention it in case you want to know.
12:25 There is some sort of scraping noise under your words: "before I even took down the receiver." Please re-record this phrase, and be sure to leave more space after it for the stage directions.
12:38 OPTIONAL pronunciation note: Gettysburg is pronounced with a hard G, not a J sound.
13:02 More space after "...essential culture has been raised."
13:08 Missed line: "Well, children, it’s eight-thirty." This is buried inside of stage directions, so will need space before and after.
13:21 More space after "Now, folks."
13:40 More space after "...relatively the same."
15:06 More space after "Oh!"
16:23 "Doctor Arlington is still in his office." There is a strange rumble under this line that actually bothered my ears.
Please re-record this bit.
16:37 More space after "All ready now?"
17:34 More space after "...wastes a lot of time."
18:15 More space after "will you go back?"
18:28 and 18:31 More space before and after "More of this."
18:35 Two missing lines: "Do you want to cry there, dear?" and "No,—personally, I think she’s speaking more in anger than in sorrow. You see, dear, you are impersonating a wronged wife. Now, you yourself, Florence darling, are an unmarried girl:—it is difficult for you to realize how excessively annoyed with her husband a married woman can become. I think I would take it with more lift. More of this, you know."
18:57 More space after "Tempo, Florence!"
21:15 More space after "Just a moment."
21:19 More space after "Listen, Florence dear."
21:56 More space after "It seems to me."
22:37 OPTIONAL pronunciation note: "More nonchalance." The 'ch' in this word is pronounced as 'sh,' not 'k.'
23:50 Missing line: "Jenny dear! come here, please!"
23:52 More space after "Yes, I would."
23:58 More space after "Never mind!"
The one other note I have for you is that your volume is very low. You could afford to amplify this by maybe 5 dB or so without clipping, I think, once you remove that click at 9:17.
Looking forward to more Pampinelli to come!