thank you Greg. And the second act was even better than the first. Changing ever so subtly from grumpy old miser to scared man, to reformed and even happy man. It was quite a challenge, and you did it masterly.
Act 1 is now PL ok.
A few suggestions for act 2:
> at 2:12: "sprinkling of thy torch spirit" - you say "spirits", but it's only one
> at 11:19: "but they are tears of penitence" - this line is repeated a few seconds later, which version do you want to keep ?
thank you Greg. And the second act was even better than the first. Changing ever so subtly from grumpy old miser to scared man, to reformed and even happy man. It was quite a challenge, and you did it masterly.
Act 1 is now PL ok.
A few suggestions for act 2:
> at 2:12: "sprinkling of thy torch spirit" - you say "spirits", but it's only one
> at 11:19: "but they are tears of penitence" - this line is repeated a few seconds later, which version do you want to keep ?
thanks
Sonia
Thank you, Sonia. This is one of the most joyous parts I have ever read. I am so happy that what I tried to project came across.
I'll make the corrections later tonight and repost Act 2.
and PL ok now, thanks. Though I still hear "spirits" with an 's' at the end, but maybe it's a trick of my ears.
Sonia
Thank you. That is strange about the "spirit" or "spirits" sound. No matter how I adjust it, I do not hear the "s" in the final version. Perhaps it is listening fatigue or something else but it just does not register to me. If, in the end, it is an issue just let me know and I will give it another go.
GregGiordano wrote: ↑January 13th, 2024, 6:11 amThank you. That is strange about the "spirit" or "spirits" sound. No matter how I adjust it, I do not hear the "s" in the final version. Perhaps it is listening fatigue or something else but it just does not register to me. If, in the end, it is an issue just let me know and I will give it another go.
no I'm sure it's fine, it must be a trick to my ears. Don't worry about it.
excellent low-life accent here, Wayne loved it. And Act 1 is straight PL ok.
In act 2 you forgot to include the OMNES lines:
at about 0:31: Omnes. No, indeed! we should hope not!
at about 0:42: Omnes. (Laughing.) No, indeed!
one could maybe argue that Sam wouldn't reply to his own question in the first omnes line. But since there are only 3 people involved in total, at least he should reply to Mrs Mildew in the second omnes line. Maybe best include both and Todd can then decide what to do.
excellent low-life accent here, Wayne loved it. And Act 1 is straight PL ok.
In act 2 you forgot to include the OMNES lines:
at about 0:31: Omnes. No, indeed! we should hope not!
at about 0:42: Omnes. (Laughing.) No, indeed!
one could maybe argue that Sam wouldn't reply to his own question in the first omnes line. But since there are only 3 people involved in total, at least he should reply to Mrs Mildew in the second omnes line. Maybe best include both and Todd can then decide what to do.
totally 
