[COMPLETE] Shadowland: September, 1919 by Various - tg

[elsieselwyn]

Submitting section 16 for review and approval. Uploaded to TriciaG

time of recording 14:47

https://librivox.org/uploads/triciag/shadowlandseptember1919_16_various_128.mp3

Thank you

Section 16 is PL OK

[ChuckW]

Section 3 - https://librivox.org/uploads/triciag/shadowlandseptember1919_03_various_128kb.mp3 [11:30]

[elsieselwyn]

Section 3 - https://librivox.org/uploads/triciag/shadowlandseptember1919_03_various_128kb.mp3 [11:30]

Thanks!

[elsieselwyn]

Section 3 - https://librivox.org/uploads/triciag/shadowlandseptember1919_03_various_128kb.mp3 [11:30]

Section 3 is PL OK

[PeeWeeVO007]

I am available for section 12 to finish off the issue. Please advise

don

[ChuckW]

Section 3 - https://librivox.org/uploads/triciag/shadowlandseptember1919_03_various_128kb.mp3 [11:30]

Section 3 is PL OK

Thanks!

[elsieselwyn]

I am available for section 12 to finish off the issue. Please advise

don

Thanks for taking the last section!

[elsieselwyn]

That means you can move this into Reader's Found whenever you have the time.

[TriciaG]

Super! Done!

[LCaulkins]

Hi Elsie, I just noticed the play is ready for PL. Sorry if it's been sitting there a long time! Queued now

[elsieselwyn]

Hi Elsie, I just noticed the play is ready for PL. Sorry if it's been sitting there a long time! Queued now

No - it just got edited together the day I quoted you to let you know

[elsieselwyn]

Hi Elsie, I just noticed the play is ready for PL. Sorry if it's been sitting there a long time! Queued now

Oh I forgot to add - I omitted the narrator's speech descriptor tags when the speaker's emotion was clear from the reader's acting.

[LCaulkins]

Cool oh, hey, I can DPL the play for you when it's finalized, if you're still looking for that

Here is the play edited together for listening when you have the time: https://librivox.org/uploads/triciag/shadowlandseptember1919_09_various_128kb.mp3 (19:59)

Hi there

My only PL Note for assembly of lines is that the group line is missing two of its "unpardonables", starting at 15:51, we should have:

"unpardonable . . . (missing unpardonable) . . . absolutely (missing unpardonable) . . . completely unpardonable"

I think it is intentional that the playwright put in so many, so we should have them all. If they're missing in the group line, you could always copy/paste from what is there now, could even use gentle pitch change to vary it up if needed.

I forgot to ask if you want constructive notes as well? If so, here are two ideas; if not, ignore the following.

- - - - -

I think it would enhance the listening experience of someone who's not also reading the text to have longer pauses ahead of most of the stage directions.

And there is a pretty substantial loudness difference between the Roger and Sheila or Therese lines here and there while you're listening. It would polish this play up super nicely if the Roger lines could be "de-amplified" a smidge and Sheila's and Therese's amplified a bit where they are very soft.

[elsieselwyn]

Cool oh, hey, I can DPL the play for you when it's finalized, if you're still looking for that

Here is the play edited together for listening when you have the time: https://librivox.org/uploads/triciag/shadowlandseptember1919_09_various_128kb.mp3 (19:59)

Hi there

My only PL Note for assembly of lines is that the group line is missing two of its "unpardonables", starting at 15:51, we should have:

"unpardonable . . . (missing unpardonable) . . . absolutely (missing unpardonable) . . . completely unpardonable"

I think it is intentional that the playwright put in so many, so we should have them all. If they're missing in the group line, you could always copy/paste from what is there now, could even use gentle pitch change to vary it up if needed.

I forgot to ask if you want constructive notes as well? If so, here are two ideas; if not, ignore the following.

- - - - -

I think it would enhance the listening experience of someone who's not also reading the text to have longer pauses ahead of most of the stage directions.

And there is a pretty substantial loudness difference between the Roger and Sheila or Therese lines here and there while you're listening. It would polish this play up super nicely if the Roger lines could be "de-amplified" a smidge and Sheila's and Therese's amplified a bit where they are very soft.

Thanks, Lynnette! I appreciate all the feedback!

[PeeWeeVO007]

submitted for your approval. Shadowlands section 12

duration: 9:01

Thanks

don