benderca wrote: ↑October 3rd, 2022, 7:24 am
I have some small notes for
Cecily, Chapter 6:
0:11 (p. 2)
Missing Word:
"to"
"Oh, don't talk like that, Dan," said Cecily reproachfully. "She's old and lonely and has had a great deal of trouble. She has buried three husbands. We must be kind to her and do the best we can
to make her visit pleasant."
1:52 (p. 6)
Missing 2 lines:
In vain Cecily implored him to
stop.
CECILY, SHOUTING:--
"That is Mr. Joseph Elliott of Markdale, a second cousin of mother's."
2:24 (p. 6)
Pronunciation of Carlisle: It should be car-lile (the second syllable should rhyme with "pile")
CECILY:--"This is Miss Julia Stanley, who used to teach in
Carlisle a few years ago."
2:48 (p. 7)
Wrong word: the word is "irreverent" - I hear "irrelevant"
CECILY, IN EXASPERATION:--"(Dan, shame on you for telling such
irreverent stories.)
4:59 (p. 11) These 2 corrections are OPTIONAL:
You say "selection" instead of "section," but I don't think the meaning is changed, so you can leave it if you like. You also add an extra "do," but that doesn't change the meaning either: "...and I'm going to
do, too," -- so also optional.
"She was awfully nice when I asked her for her name for the quilt," protested Cecily, "and she took a ten-cent
section after
all. So I'd like to give her the rose-leaves--
and I'm going to, too, Miss Felicity."
I also have one OPTIONAL note for
Cecily Chapter 7:
0:10 (p. 2)
Missing words: "and kind" (meaning isn't changed - so you can decide whether you want to correct it or not):
"Oh, Dan, Cousin Mattie and her sisters-in-law are just as nice
and kind as they can be,"
Your portrayal of Cecily is soooooo adorable, Allie!
Thanks!