COMPLETE[PLAY]A Country Mouse, by Arthur Law - thw

[jennlea]

Here are the missing lines for Violet in Act 2:
https://librivox.org/uploads/toddhw/violet_missinglines_act2.mp3

[wib66]

Here are the missing lines for Violet in Act 2:
https://librivox.org/uploads/toddhw/violet_missinglines_act2.mp3

thank you so much

[wib66]

I have now edited and reuploaded act 2

https://librivox.org/uploads/toddhw/countrymouse_02_law_128kb.mp3

48.04

[benderca]

I have now edited and reuploaded act 2

https://librivox.org/uploads/toddhw/countrymouse_02_law_128kb.mp3

48.04

Nicely done! I have one optional suggestion. Violet's line below sounds a little bit softer than everyone else's:
12:06-12:10 "You are entirely mistaken. He was striking a match."
The volume could be raised slightly, but it is not necessary as she is just walking out -- it could be that she says the line as she leaves.

Super! PL OK!

[wib66]

Thank you

[benderca]

I have a few small notes for Act 3:

I suggest that you tighten up the spaces (at 1:53 and 1:58) between Mrs. C.'s scrubbing and rubbing and Lord Robert's attempts to cut her off (so it's clear he's interrupting ).
Mrs. C. You may scrub and you may rub (1:53)
Lord R. Yes, quite so.

Mrs. C. You may scrub and you may- (1:58)
Lord R. Look here. Are you a gramophone?


I suggest cutting out the following stage directions:
45:04-45:07 Lady S. (laughing)
45:18-45:19 Violet. (laughing)
45:24-45:26 Lord R. (laughing)


52:06-52:07 It sounds like Vyse's line "yes" is cut off at the end.


52:26-52:27 Others. You! !
It should be Violet, Lady Silvia, Vyse, Bowlby, and Lord Robert saying "You!", but it's only Lord Robert -- which sounds a little bit strange, as he'd be the least interested in this news (whereas the others all have reason to be shocked/upset/surprised/taken aback).

Nice editing! Fantastic acting everyone -- this play is hilarious and entertaining!

[ToddHW]

Thank you.

Todd

[wib66]

I have a few small notes for Act 3:

I suggest that you tighten up the spaces (at 1:53 and 1:58) between Mrs. C.'s scrubbing and rubbing and Lord Robert's attempts to cut her off (so it's clear he's interrupting ).
Mrs. C. You may scrub and you may rub (1:53)
Lord R. Yes, quite so.

Mrs. C. You may scrub and you may- (1:58)
Lord R. Look here. Are you a gramophone?


I suggest cutting out the following stage directions:
45:04-45:07 Lady S. (laughing)
45:18-45:19 Violet. (laughing)
45:24-45:26 Lord R. (laughing)


52:06-52:07 It sounds like Vyse's line "yes" is cut off at the end.


52:26-52:27 Others. You! !
It should be Violet, Lady Silvia, Vyse, Bowlby, and Lord Robert saying "You!", but it's only Lord Robert -- which sounds a little bit strange, as he'd be the least interested in this news (whereas the others all have reason to be shocked/upset/surprised/taken aback).

Nice editing! Fantastic acting everyone -- this play is hilarious and entertaining!

thanks I have asked readers for the line so I can put multiples in they were not there in the original files

[wib66]

I have now edited and reuploaded act 2

https://librivox.org/uploads/toddhw/countrymouse_02_law_128kb.mp3

48.04

Nicely done! I have one optional suggestion. Violet's line below sounds a little bit softer than everyone else's:
12:06-12:10 "You are entirely mistaken. He was striking a match."
The volume could be raised slightly, but it is not necessary as she is just walking out -- it could be that she says the line as she leaves.

Super! PL OK!

I have checked this part and on replay gain it is at 90 dB so I will leave it as it is thanks

[ToddHW]

Here's my all-together line for the end of the play:

https://librivox.org/uploads/toddhw/countrymouse_bowlby_alltogether.mp3

Thanks, Todd

[benderca]

52:26-52:27 Others. You! !
It should be Violet, Lady Silvia, Vyse, Bowlby, and Lord Robert saying "You!", but it's only Lord Robert -- which sounds a little bit strange, as he'd be the least interested in this news (whereas the others all have reason to be shocked/upset/surprised/taken aback).

Nice editing! Fantastic acting everyone -- this play is hilarious and entertaining!

thanks I have asked readers for the line so I can put multiples in they were not there in the original files

Super! I think it will be worth it for the effect. You may not need everybody, however -- maybe 2 or 3 more voices would suffice.

[benderca]

Nicely done! I have one optional suggestion. Violet's line below sounds a little bit softer than everyone else's:
12:06-12:10 "You are entirely mistaken. He was striking a match."
The volume could be raised slightly, but it is not necessary as she is just walking out -- it could be that she says the line as she leaves.

Super! PL OK!

I have checked this part and on replay gain it is at 90 dB so I will leave it as it is thanks

Excellent -- it's probably just my ears...

[wib66]

Here's my all-together line for the end of the play:

https://librivox.org/uploads/toddhw/countrymouse_bowlby_alltogether.mp3

Thanks, Todd

thank you

[jennlea]

Here is Violet's "you":
https://librivox.org/uploads/toddhw/countrymouse_violet_you.mp3

[wib66]

Here is Violet's "you":
https://librivox.org/uploads/toddhw/countrymouse_violet_you.mp3

great thanks