Here are your notes. The ones in the optional section can be ignored, they're included for completeness's sake:
0:00: Instead of 'Chapter 14', you should say 'Chapter 11, part 1'. It is Section 14, but not Chapter 14.
0:19: Same as above
1:46: Spurious 'he' between "But gradually" and "the varied colouring"
2:54: I don't think your pronunciation of 'criticisms' in the phrase "She even indulged in some hostile criticisms" is clear. It should be
'KRIT-uh-siz-umz'
2:57: 'persevered' in "The painter naturally persevered in his own course" should be pronounced
'pur-suh-VEERD', not 'pur-SURVD'
5:12: 'stingy' in "Nor I that you were so stingy" should be pronounced
'STIN-jee', not 'STING-ee'
7:30: I don't think your pronunciation of 'he entertained' in the phrase "the slight modicum of regard he entertained for Sénécal" is clear (
en-ter-TEYND)
12:40: I'm hearing "glass blows full of salt meats" rather than "glass bowls full of salt meats"
13:04: 'sturgeon's jowl' in "there was a sturgeon's jowl moistened with champagne" should be pronounced '
STUR-juhnz joul'
14:48: I'm hearing "As this remark" rather than "At this remark"
15:49: Some sort of alarm during "He even sent away the truffles"
16:57: I'm hearing "for the sake of a load" rather than "for the sake of a laugh" (
lahf)
17:07: I'm hearing "and entered a jovial blade" rather than "there entered a jovial blade"
17:09: 'rough' in "with somewhat rough-looking features" should be pronounced
'ruhf', not 'roh'
17:28: I'm hearing "as they passed a hen hock" instead of "as they passed a heath-cock" (
heeth kok)
19:05: I'm hearing "Cisy smacked his taunt" rather then "Cisy smacked his tongue" (
tuhng)
19:30: I'm hearing "And a load ran round the table" rather than "And a laugh ran round the table" (see 16:57)
20:08: 'vouched' in "vouched for his honesty" should be pronounced
'voucht', not 'vohsht'. Also, you said 'by his honesty' instead of 'for his honesty'
20:43: 'hiccoughed' in "Cisy, who had staggered to his feet, hiccoughed" should be pronounced
'HIK-uhpt'
21:30: I'm hearing "Joseph indulged in repeated outbursts of loater" rather then "Joseph indulged in repeated outbursts of laughter" (
LAHF-ter)
24:33: 'roughly' in "the citizen replies roughly" should be pronounce
'RUHF-lee', not 'ROH-lee'
25:09: Repetition of 'you' in "while you turn your wrist"
25:17: I'm not hearing the 'he' of "He grasped the rod"
26:19: 'shawls' in "while here and there shawls were fixed on wooden racks" should be pronounced
to rhyme with 'calls'
27:19: I'm hearing an extra 'of' in 'offered' in "as the person to whom the insult had been offered"
31:21: 'ballet' in "where a ballet was being performed" is pronounced
'BA-ley', not 'BA-let'
32:54: I'm hearing "He finally wished to be ill in earn" rather then "He finally wished to be ill in earnest"
33:10: I'm hearing "This appeared an anonymous seer-coom-ta to Cisy" rather then "This appeared an ominous circumstance to Cisy" (
OM-ih-nuhs SUR-kuhm-stans)
35:57: Same as 0:00. Should be 'Chapter 11, part 1'
36:00: You need five seconds of silence at the end, while you less than two
Also, the file name isn't quite right. It should be sentimentaleducation_14_flaubert_128kb.mp3
OPTIONAL:
3:53: 'ascertaining' in "Now the Maréchale did not give herself much bother about ascertaining who was going to pay" should be pronounced
'as-er-TEYN-ing', not 'ah-SUR-tn-ing'
8:50: 'plunged' in "plunged Frederick into a thoughtful mood" should be pronounced
'pluhnjd', not 'plugged'
10:22: 'mortgages' in "the amount of the mortgages with which the estate was encumbered" should be pronounced
'MAWR-gij-iz', not 'MORT-uh-jiz'
10:35: 'mortgage' in "the registration of the mortgage within the proper time", see above
13:56: I'm hearing "And, as they were shallowing the first spoonful" instead of "And, as they were swallowing the first spoonful"
16:30: 'idiocy' in "but the young aristocrat's idiocy had disarmed him" should be pronounced
'ID-ee-uh-see'
19:37: I'm hearing "He shallowed two glasses of water" rather than "He swallowed two glasses of water"
24:04: 'plunged' in "looked as if he were plunged in reflection" should be pronounced
'pluhnjd', not 'PLUNG-ed'
25:14: 'Père Vauthier' should be pronounced like '
pair VOH-tee-ey', not 'peer waiter'
33:42: 'complaisance' in "Out of complaisance the pedagogue" should be pronounced
'kuhm-PLEY-zuhns', not 'KOM-plans'
34:42: 'plunged' in "and was soon plunged in sleep". See 24:04