OPEN[Play] Don Carlos by Schiller - thw

adrianstephens · Post by **adrianstephens** » April 16th, 2024, 12:02 am

jennlea wrote: ↑April 15th, 2024, 3:39 pm

Thank you for your careful PLing, Adrian. Here are the corrections:
https://librivox.org/uploads/toddhw/doncarlos_princesseboli_2.mp3
27:30

The last correction ended up being at 20:48 on my file.

Thank you, Jennlea. PL OK. And thank you for correcting my correction, which reminds me of a poem ending up "... and so on ad infinitum."
Regards,
Adrian

alanmapstone · Post by **alanmapstone** » April 16th, 2024, 12:33 am

Thanks Jenn and Adrian

Inkell · Post by **Inkell** » April 16th, 2024, 1:45 am

adrianstephens wrote: ↑April 15th, 2024, 11:56 pm Thank you, Inkell. Nicely done.
PL Notes
34:55 missing stage direction "Queen to princess eboli"

I cut that stage direction on purpose, the Queen starts her address to Princess Eboli by saying 'Princess' so I thought that made it sufficiently clear who she was now speaking to without the need for the stage direction

adrianstephens · Post by **adrianstephens** » April 16th, 2024, 1:59 am

Inkell wrote: ↑April 16th, 2024, 1:45 am
adrianstephens wrote: ↑April 15th, 2024, 11:56 pm Thank you, Inkell. Nicely done.
PL Notes
34:55 missing stage direction "Queen to princess eboli"
I cut that stage direction on purpose, the Queen starts her address to Princess Eboli by saying 'Princess' so I thought that made it sufficiently clear who she was now speaking to without the need for the stage direction :?

OK, no problem with me, as it was intentional. PL OK.

alanmapstone · Post by **alanmapstone** » April 16th, 2024, 2:21 am

Thanks to Adrian and Congratulations to Inkell

Great to have the first completed Act.

alanmapstone · Post by **alanmapstone** » April 19th, 2024, 1:10 am

Stage Directions for Act 2 are Ready for PL!

https://librivox.org/uploads/toddhw/doncarlos_stagedirections_2.mp3
26.40

Sorry these have taken so long, I am getting a lot of headaches at present and so having to limit my screen time. Also the SD are turning out to be longer than I expected.

As it is likely that this act will need to be divided into two sections I have added at the end alternative intros/outros for this case.

If it is possible I would prefer the act to be divided between scenes 9 and 10 where there is a break in the dramatic action. Hopefully this will leave 2 sections both within the 74 minute maximum. If not we will need to think again.

adrianstephens · Post by **adrianstephens** » April 19th, 2024, 2:45 am

alanmapstone wrote: ↑April 19th, 2024, 1:10 am Stage Directions for Act 2 are Ready for PL!

https://librivox.org/uploads/toddhw/doncarlos_stagedirections_2.mp3
26.40

Sorry these have taken so long, I am getting a lot of headaches at present and so having to limit my screen time. Also the SD are turning out to be longer than I expected. :(

As it is likely that this act will need to be divided into two sections I have added at the end alternative intros/outros for this case.

If it is possible I would prefer the act to be divided between scenes 9 and 10 where there is a break in the dramatic action. Hopefully this will leave 2 sections both within the 74 minute maximum. If not we will need to think again.

Thank you Alan. Sorry to hear about the headaches.
Please don't overdo your Librivoxing - we can wait for a few days, but we could never find another Alan :0)

PL Notes
3:45 two missing stage directions: "[The KING keeps his eye steadfastly fixed on him." and
"[ALVA, coloring deeply, is about to speak."
6:45 "taking the page by the hand" you don't prefix this with "Carlos".
25:00 "they embrace" - I don't see this in the text

Best Regards,
Adrian

alanmapstone · Post by **alanmapstone** » April 19th, 2024, 3:16 am

Act 2 Stage Directions revised

https://librivox.org/uploads/toddhw/doncarlos_stagedirections_2.mp3
26.52

I am constantly amazed by the speed at which you PL things

adrianstephens · Post by **adrianstephens** » April 19th, 2024, 3:25 am

alanmapstone wrote: ↑April 19th, 2024, 3:16 am Act 2 Stage Directions revised

https://librivox.org/uploads/toddhw/doncarlos_stagedirections_2.mp3
26.52

I am constantly amazed by the speed at which you PL things :lol:

Thank you Alan. PL OK!
Regards,
Adrian

alanmapstone · Post by **alanmapstone** » April 19th, 2024, 3:31 am

Thanks Adrian

Now all we need to complete Act 2 is someone to read the lines of the PAGE in scenes 4 & 7. This role gender neutral and could be read by someone who appears elsewhere in the play.

Winnifred · Post by **Winnifred** » April 19th, 2024, 4:52 pm

I could take on the Page, as the Duchess Olivarez doesn't appear in this act.

Cheers,

alanmapstone · Post by **alanmapstone** » April 19th, 2024, 5:37 pm

Winnifred wrote: ↑April 19th, 2024, 4:52 pm I could take on the Page, as the Duchess Olivarez doesn't appear in this act.

Thanks Winnifred
That would be great

Inkell · Post by **Inkell** » April 20th, 2024, 3:56 am

alanmapstone wrote: ↑April 19th, 2024, 5:37 pm
Winnifred wrote: ↑April 19th, 2024, 4:52 pm I could take on the Page, as the Duchess Olivarez doesn't appear in this act.
Thanks Winnifred
That would be great

Doesn't the page appear in two acts?

alanmapstone · Post by **alanmapstone** » April 20th, 2024, 4:00 am

Inkell wrote: ↑April 20th, 2024, 3:56 am
alanmapstone wrote: ↑April 19th, 2024, 5:37 pm
Winnifred wrote: ↑April 19th, 2024, 4:52 pm I could take on the Page, as the Duchess Olivarez doesn't appear in this act.
Thanks Winnifred
That would be great
Doesn't the page appear in two acts?

The Page in act 2 is a Page to the Queen whereas the Page in act 5 is a Page to the King, so a different character. I am sure they had more than one page between them

Inkell · Post by **Inkell** » April 20th, 2024, 4:06 am

alanmapstone wrote: ↑April 20th, 2024, 4:00 am The Page in act 2 is a Page to the Queen whereas the Page in act 5 is a Page to the King, so a different character. I am sure they had more than one page between them

I don't think that clashes with Olivarez actually but if you'd like them to be two separate roles fair enough, I'll change my notes