Winnifred wrote: ↑April 13th, 2024, 5:26 pm
I haven't yet DPL'd a dramatic work of this length, so I suppose that's the next logical step for me! Reporting for DPL duty, Inkell, if you'll have me.
Thanks,
I'd be happy to have you, Winnifred! Thank you, you're a life saver
This will be longer than the individual plays over in Greek Myths but it is shorter than a full length play with multiple acts so it is a good logical next step if you are building up your experience with PLing dramatic works
EDIT: Todd, can you please delete my listeners wanted post as Winnifred has kindly offered to be our DPL?
Either shouting or passing out! Very nicely done. Just a couple of notes:
At 9:55, there’s an extra “Where’s my hat” that isn’t in the text. The line begins just “Here’s my hat…”
At 11:29, you read the line all the way through without a pause for the stage direction “[laughs].” However, as you actually also laugh there, the stage direction could probably be left out (is that permissible? If so, you can ignore this one.)
Winnifred wrote: ↑April 14th, 2024, 3:46 pm
Either shouting or passing out! Very nicely done. Just a couple of notes:
At 9:55, there’s an extra “Where’s my hat” that isn’t in the text. The line begins just “Here’s my hat…”
At 11:29, you read the line all the way through without a pause for the stage direction “[laughs].” However, as you actually also laugh there, the stage direction could probably be left out (is that permissible? If so, you can ignore this one.)
Cheers,
Thanks, Winnifred!
And in regards to your question, yes, it is at the discretion of the editor to leave out stage directions if they feel they are already covered such as leaving out [laughs] if the reader actually laughed
Either shouting or passing out! Very nicely done. Just a couple of notes:
At 9:55, there’s an extra “Where’s my hat” that isn’t in the text. The line begins just “Here’s my hat…”
At 11:29, you read the line all the way through without a pause for the stage direction “[laughs].” However, as you actually also laugh there, the stage direction could probably be left out (is that permissible? If so, you can ignore this one.)
Cheers,
Removed the Where's my hat at 9:55. Uploaded again for Spot PL.
When I edit, I often remove stage directions that a reader's voice already takes care of - things like laughs, sighs, speaks softly or loudly or angrily, etc. So I made no change at 11:29.
Either shouting or passing out! Very nicely done. Just a couple of notes:
At 9:55, there’s an extra “Where’s my hat” that isn’t in the text. The line begins just “Here’s my hat…”
At 11:29, you read the line all the way through without a pause for the stage direction “[laughs].” However, as you actually also laugh there, the stage direction could probably be left out (is that permissible? If so, you can ignore this one.)
Cheers,
Removed the Where's my hat at 9:55. Uploaded again for Spot PL.
When I edit, I often remove stage directions that a reader's voice already takes care of - things like laughs, sighs, speaks softly or loudly or angrily, etc. So I made no change at 11:29.
Thanks, Todd
Makes sense, and certainly flows more smoothly that way.
Thank you both! We're making good progress now and I should have the stage directions done soon too, I recorded them awhile so I just need to edit them.
In other news my voice is sounding recovered now so here is the PL corrections for our designing widow:
PL Notes for Comus in Comus:
Hi Greg
Just a few minor corrections:
at 2.11 (Line125) text is Come, let us our rites begin - but us is missing
at 3.06 (line 137) text is Of all thy dues be done - I hear duties
at 3.24 (line 141) text is And to the tell-tale Sun descry - but I hear decry
at 6.41 (line 257) Scylla should be pronounced Si-lla
at 14.25 (line 720) text is If all the world - but I hear With all the world
at 17.57 (line 810) text And settlings of a melancholy blood - but I hear And settings of...
otherwise OK!
Alan the sixth age shifts into the slippered pantaloon with spectacles on nose