Wow! As much as I look forward to nearing these, Paul, and I truly do, it probably won't be until tomorrow morning before I begin proofing them. (I am GMT -6). Have a good night.
Nice transition in your Alberich characterization from The Rhinegold through to the end of Siegfried. You've evolved him well. Just these few notes ...
PL Notes for Alberich in Siegfried
(1:37) "Were I still the blind ... Silly fool that I was" [The word 'the' is omitted]
I might be able to find another instance where you've said 'the' with a similar inflection which I could copy and insert here but you might well prefer to restate the line yourself. It's up to you to decide.
(3:05) "I will storm / Proud Walhall with Hella's hosts" [The word 'storm' sounds like 'stall' in this passage.]
Fine, fine performance of Alberich throughout all three plays in which the character appears. Minor note here. Edit at your discretion. If you'd prefer that I address in editing let me know and, in that case, I will change status from PL Notes to PLOK.
PL Note for Alberich in The Twilight of the Gods
Hagen pronunciation at 0:09: the 'a' should sound somewhat more like that in the pronunciation guide.
Note that I can reuse another instance of you saying 'Hagen' in place of the one here - e.g. from 0:36 or 1:11 of your recording - but the intonation might not be a perfect match. I'll leave it to your discretion as to whether you'd prefer to rerecord [just] the instance of the name Hagen that begins the stanza of lines at 0:09.
Of course it's excellent Alan. I have just one brief note for you to consider ...
PL Note for Gunther
(1:55) "Why wake dissension and doubt?" [You inserted the word 'this' just before 'dissension']
I think I can excise the extraneous word 'this' cleanly in editing, if you trust me to do that. Or, if you prefer, you could rerecord or edit the line yourself. If you would rather I address this in editing, please let me know and I will mark your recording PLOK "as is".
alanmapstone wrote: ↑November 14th, 2023, 4:20 am
Hi Brian
I have listened to the Narration for Rhinegold and it all seems to be present and correct. So I think this will be OK for editing.
Well Done!
I believe you have a strong connection with this character and it showed in the passion with which you delivered their lines. Very nicely done! I did take notes on anything that I caught while listening to your fine performance:
05:28 "Thou art the spring / That I used to pine for," [missing That]
05:34 "My heart hailed thee friend" [read as: "My heart hailed thee as friend"]
07:34 "And ere now thy glowing / Eye have I seen: [read as "And ere now thy glowing / Eye I have seen:"]
08:10 "The name of thy father was Wölfe?" [I do think that the 'W' in Wölfe should be pronounced as a 'V' in English]
13:27 "From off the field" [read as "Far off the field"]
I suppose the one at 5:34 alters the meaning a bit. I'll leave it to you decide which of the others you want to address. When you upload your revision please let me know which you edited so that I'll know where to focus for spot PL.
. All improvement feedback welcome.