[Complete][Poetry]Canadian Battlefields and Other Poems, by J R Wilkinson-ag

[Lmnei]

Hey Sonia -

Section 80 has been fixed! Same time - so nothing in that area changed...

Thanks!

Lynda

[Kitty]

Section 80 has been fixed! Same time - so nothing in that area changed...

ok at least I clearly hear the v-sound now instead of a 'b'. The stress seems still odd for me, but I must have been mistaken then. I can mark it PL ok now. Thanks

Sonia

[Lmnei]

HI Kitty -

Sections 62 to 73 are in the MW now

No idea where I put Section 61 on my laptop so looks like I will be re-recording that one!

Lynda

[Lmnei]

OOP!

I recorded more... Sections 84 to 93 are also ready... I will slow down now!

Lynda

[Kitty]

Sections 62 to 73 are in the MW now

you've been busy over the weekend !

A great epic poem though, I loved all the special instalments for the planets.

A bit of a snag: except for Chapter 18 (Section 72), you always forgot to include "chapter" in the title. From 1-6 you always said it including "chapter". Maybe you want to be consistent throughout the poem ? So I'll mention them:

Section 62:
> at 0:15: "Chapter 8" – missing "chapter"

Section 63:
> at 0:16: "Chapter 9" – missing "chapter"

Section 64:
> at 0:15: "Chapter 10" – missing "chapter"

Section 65:
> at 0:15: "Chapter 11" – missing "chapter"

Section 66:
> at 0:13: "Chapter 12" – missing "chapter"

Section 67:
> at 0:15: "Chapter 13" – missing "chapter"
> at 1:32: "over the tremulous seas" – you say "tremendulous"

Section 68:
> at 0:14: "Chapter 14" – missing "chapter"
> at 1:50: "and the tremulous stars" – again, you say "tremendulous"
> at 2:57: "never again on thy presence to intrude" – you say "pretence"
> at 3:22: "we fervently pray" – you say "feverently"

Section 69:
> at 0:15: "Chapter 15" – missing "chapter"
> at 3:20: "the black annihilation of a cold phantom tomb" – I hear "anhiliation"

Section 70:
> at 0:15: "Chapter 16" – missing "chapter"
> at 1:33: repeat, can be cut once: "Taurus, Virgo"
> at 4:12: "and their faint and tremulous light" – again: "tremendulous"

Section 71:
> at 0:14: "Chapter 17" – missing "chapter"
> at 2:12: surely death and annihilation" – again: "anhilation"
> at 3:17: "where all life is free" – you forgot "life"

Section 73:
> at 0:14: "Chapter 19" – missing "chapter"
> at 0:26: "and dread annihilation" – again: "anhilation"

Oh yes and Section 72 is PL ok.

short break...then I'll go on with the next bunch

thanks

Sonia

[Kitty]

I recorded more... Sections 84 to 93 are also ready...

very good poems. For the last one I was expecting you to break out into singing. Nice touch to repeat the chorus like this.

Sections 84-91 are straight PL ok.

Section 92:
> at 1:20: "steals over my soul" – you say "heart"
> at 1:26: "though fraught with many banished hopes" – I hear "fought" and "bandished"

Section 93:
> at 0:02: "a song": this gets repeated later at 0:16 - maybe you only want to say it once ?

thanks

Sonia

[Lmnei]

Sonia -

Sections 62 - 73 except 22 have been upoloaded for your PL listening pleasure!

Lynda

[Kitty]

Sections 62 - 73 except 22 have been upoloaded for your PL listening pleasure!

you mean 72 surely...

all sections now PL ok, thank you.

Sonia

[alg1001]

Hi Lynda,
Just checking in. Please let us know your timeline for this.
Thanks,
Amy

[alg1001]

Hi Lynda,
Should this be put on hold for you? If you don't think you will be able to get back to it, we can open list it as abandoned and someone may pick it up and finish it.
Let me know please. I will move forward with that if I don't hear from you in a week or so.
Take care,
Amy

[alg1001]

Hi All,
This is an abandoned Solo being opened up to the group to finish it off. I haven't had a chance to compile the wordcounts, but I will work on getting them in there.
Thanks,
-Amy

[Stunning]

I'll claim sections 110 and 111

[Stunning]

Is there a limit to how many sections we can claim? I don't want to claim too many at once, just to make sure I get stuff done in a timely manner, but I'll probably read a few more if I'm allowed.

[alg1001]

Hi Stunning,
There is no limit to how many you can claim. I think it works well to claim a few and once they are done to claim more as you finish them.
Thank you for your claims!
-Amy

[alanmapstone]

Section 61 &94 please!

I may pick a few more later.