Val,valroth wrote: ↑June 8th, 2023, 10:43 am Hi Wayne,
The latest chapter is comparatively long and definitely the most challenging to date. Your “humble capacity” (more accurately your expertise and advice) would be welcomed for this instalment. I took a few chances.I used some delay on the voices of the “Great Oz” (voices that vary according to the changing appearance of the Wizard). I felt emboldened to try “effects” to make Oz more dramatic… buuuuut it may be too much, especially the delay/echo used on the first voice of Oz when Dorothy is received. So have a listen and let me know.
I know you’ll be honest and I am happy to change what ever needs to be changed. My ears are not what they used to be!
(And the heavy smoke billowing from the wild fires in northern Ontario and Quebec may have contributed to the scary edge in my voice!Ohhh the poor trees… I think you’re more used to wild fires in the North West, we are here too but have never been affected so directly in Southern Ontario! Hoping for rain and more rain soon.
Have a great day,
Val
First of all, I think your echo effect was right on. You mentioned more on the first, but I think that was just right. Each of the other 'representations' of Oz were different, which was great.
I have to admit that this was not your best reading. The reading itself was good, but you seemed to have some problems with the text for some reason (the smoke getting in your eyes?). I only mentioned the errors that I thought should be corrected for more clarity or just for the feeling of Baum's writing. Those that didn't seem to me to make any difference at all in the meaning I didn't mention. There were probably 5-7 of those.
Here are the ones I thought needed corrections:
2:13.25 and they demand to see the Great Oz.” You said Wizard of
5:01 These she also led to rooms, You added 'had' between she and also
5:32.5 just as if it were not one of the most wonderful rooms in the world. You said beautiful
5:57 and did not like being shut up in a room; You said he
7:39 She opened a little door and Dorothy walked boldly through You said 'the' and left out 'little'.
19:22.5 Then a low, quiet voice came from the Ball of Fire, and these were the words it spoke: You said 'the'. Small, but I think it probably should be changed. Also, you said 'said'. Again small, but should probably be corrected.
19:40 I am a Cowardly Lion, afraid of everything. You said the.
20:59.25 Then I shall never have courage,” You added 'my' between have and courage.
Thanks for all your work. Again, I am enjoying the story and your rendition of it.
Wayne
