COMPLETE[PLAY]School for Greybeards by Cowley - thw

[Kitty]

This is what comes from rushing. I fix five errors and make two more!

yes these things happen. Not to worry, now it's perfectly PL ok, thank you

Sonia

[GregGiordano]

This is what comes from rushing. I fix five errors and make two more!

yes these things happen. Not to worry, now it's perfectly PL ok, thank you

Sonia

Thank you. I hate making any errors, especially ones that I made without paying proper attention.

Another one off the list!

Greg

[silverquill]

Hope I got all the DP, and didn't miss too many asides.

very well done and you didn't miss any asides, but the problem with these old scripts is that often the aside is put after the speech it refers to, so there are a few names that need be inserted. I hope I found them all, it was quite tricky sometimes assessing when the aside started. But apart from that, excellent job, as always. Thank you.

Act 1:
> at 1:45: repeat of "Peter read by" - Peter has been mentioned before, so can be cut at this place
> at about 2:00: please insert "Scene: Portugal" at the end of the dramatis personae and before "Prologue"

Act 2:
> at 1:28: (p. 23) "Sebastian and Viola" - you usually said "vee-ola", here you say "vye-ola"
> at 1:39: (p. 23) "Viola coming forward" - same here
> at 3:08: (p. 28) "Viola aside" - you forgot the name
> at 3:16: (p. 28) "Viola aside" - same here
> at 3:26: (p. 29) "Viola aside" - same here
> at about 3:38: (p. 29) please insert: "Exit"

Act 3:
> at 0:54: (P. 34) "Henry aside" - you forgot the name

Act 4:
> at 0:29: (p. 45) "Octavio aside" - please insert name
> at 0:49: (p. 46) "Octavio aside" - same here
> at 1:57: (p. 50) "Alexis spitefully" - same here
> at 2:02: (p. 50) "Alexis aside" - same here

Act 5:
> at 3:20: (p. 61) "Antonia mournfully" - please insert name
> at about 7:33: (p. 74) missed line: "to the house"
> at the end: (p. iii-ix) you forgot to read the opening adress at this point. I think Todd wanted it included at the end, so there won't be any spoilers

Sonia

Well, it wasn't clear to me that the names here were needed, but glad to do the corrections along with the rest.
It's too late for me to record the Address to put at the end of Act V, but will get it done as soon as I can. Weekends tend to be busy for me.

As always, thank you for your careful PL and excellent notes, Sonia

Corrected files:

https://librivox.org/uploads/toddhw/schoolforgreybeards_stage_1.mp3
https://librivox.org/uploads/toddhw/schoolforgreybeards_stage_2.mp3
https://librivox.org/uploads/toddhw/schoolforgreybeards_stage_3.mp3
https://librivox.org/uploads/toddhw/schoolforgreybeards_stage_4.mp3

[ToddHW]

Thank you.

Todd

[Kitty]

Well, it wasn't clear to me that the names here were needed

yes it's kinda hard sometimes to find out which part of the sentence is the aside. I totally understand. At some sentences I spent nearly 2 minutes figuring it out from the context. Todd might even overrule my judgement in the end (if he dares).

But all well corrected now and PL ok. Thanks

Sonia

[silverquill]

Act 5:
> at 3:20: (p. 61) "Antonia mournfully" - please insert name
> at about 7:33: (p. 74) missed line: "to the house"
> at the end: (p. iii-ix) you forgot to read the opening adress at this point. I think Todd wanted it included at the end, so there won't be any spoilers

Sonia

Okay, here is Act V with the two little corrections and the addition of "An Address" at the end.

[Beeswaxcandle]

a great character as well, a mix of hothead and cavalier. Well portrayed, thanks. My ears may be a bit bad because I constantly hear "Antonio" instead of "Antonia", but I'm sure you said it correctly throughout, I trust you there.

So only one small bit to correct:

Act 1:

> at 1:31: (p. 4) "I fought to punish" - you say "sought"

Sonia

Hmm, listening to myself again, I do tend to slur the "ia" a bit and there's not a lot of difference in my normal accent between that and "io" on the end of a name. I'll keep that in mind for future works.

Act 1 file replaced—08:33

[Kitty]

Okay, here is Act V with the two little corrections and the addition of "An Address" at the end.

thanks, that was an interesting introduction to the play. Very well narrated

I did find a few small errors still:

> at 9:41: (p. v) "desirous to surround my task of dramatic writing" – you say "talk"
> at 12:22: (p. vii) "for when it is known, that in the original, the scene lay amongst traders" – you forgot "the" which makes the sentence sound incomplete
> at 13:56: (p. ix) "or the fascinations of beauty" – you say "falsifications"
> at about 14:14: (p. ix) maybe you could also say "Hannah Cowley" at the end, to make clear who wrote the intro
> at 14:15: repeat "end of an address" – you can cut one version

thanks

Sonia

[Kitty]

Act 1 file replaced—08:33

and PL ok now, thank you

Sonia

[silverquill]

Very perceptive to hear these errors!
Let's try this:

https://librivox.org/uploads/toddhw/schoolforgreybeards_stage_5.mp3

Thanks again, Sonia, for the good PL

[Kitty]

https://librivox.org/uploads/toddhw/schoolforgreybeards_stage_5.mp3

oh that was quick and now PL ok. Perfect edits

thank you Larry

Sonia

[redrun]

I'll take Jaquez, if I may.

[ToddHW]

Thank you.

Todd

[redrun]

This servant seems to have some grand ideas of the queen's mercy toward brave, victorious but disobedient duelists.
https://librivox.org/uploads/toddhw/schoolforgreybeards_jaquez_1.mp3 (1:15)

[ToddHW]

Thank you.

Todd