hello Breadd, and welcome to the dramatic fun, which you might find highly addictive like so many of us
Lovely to hear a new voice in our group. And you acted your lines very well, Harry has the needed spunk and mischief in his voice for this character.
I liked it. Wonderful debut and hopefully not your last appearance.
If I could just suggest one small improvement for your recording...sometimes I can hear a very strident 's', I suspect it's because you have the microphone too close to your mouth. Try, if possible,
putting it to the side of you, that way you don't blow straight into it (also good against plosives) but you speak alongside it, which gives a better sound often.
I can mark
Acts 2 and 5 straight
PL ok. (congrats for your first official sections)
A few speeches were missed in the other two acts. Yes, this script is a nightmare and very demanding on the reader to figure out which lines belong to which character, because sometimes Harry is called Harry, or Henry, or Young Clare or simply Clare. It depends on the scene and often a give-away is who he is talking to, Fabell and Raymond are the guys he is doing mischief with, so often these speeches belong to young Clare.
I think I found all of those that need to be added:
for Act 1:
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at about 0:27: please insert
three missed speeches, because in this final scene it says "[Enter Raymond and young Jerningham and
young Clare.]" so "Clare" this time is supposed to be Harry, not his father:
1. Come, boy, and make me this same groning love,
Troubled with stitches and the cough a'th lungs,
That wept his eyes out when he was a child,
And ever since hath shot at hudman-blind,
Make him leap, caper, jerk, and laugh, and sing,
And play me horse-tricks;
Make Cupid wanton as his mother's dove:
But in this sort, boy, I would have thee love.
2. What, thou married? let me look upon thee, Rogue; who has given out this of thee? how camst thou into this ill name? What company hast thou been in, Rascall?
3. Raymond Mounchensey, I would have thee know,
He does not breath this air,
Whose love I cherish, and whose soul I love
More than Mounchensey's:
Nor ever in my life did see the man
Whom, for his wit and many vertuous parts,
I think more worthy of my sister's love.
But since the matter grows unto this pass,
I must not seem to cross my Father's will;
But when thou list to visit her by night,
My horses sadled, and the stable door
Stands ready for thee; use them at thy pleasure.
In honest marriage wed her frankly, boy,
And if thou getst her, lad, God give thee joy!
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for Act 3:
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at about 0:28: also here
four missed lines in the final scene. Whenever Fabell and Jerningham show up, usually it's young Clare who is in their company, also these sentences would ill fit for the father, the son is more flippant and irreverent in his speeches
1. Come, come, how does she, noble Capouchin?
2. Z'blood, she'll have nere a Nun unbagd to sing mass then.
3. But whither, Raymond?
4. We will not fail the hour.
My life and fortune now lies in your power.
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Also while I was browsing to find the correct speeches, I noticed that
young Clare also appears in Act 4, so I added this section in the Magic Window for you. In this scene, starting with: [Enter Clare, Jerningham, and Milliscent.] and ending with "Peace that's my father's voice (which clearly shows it's the son speaking) This is the scene where the young men are trying to get the sister out from the nunnery and get her married.
So I think we need these
13 speeches, but check the scene again in case I missed one:
1. Franke Jerningham!
2. S'foot, we shall lose our way, it's so dark; whereabouts are we?
3. Ten, the bell says.
4. Nay, as sure as thou liv'st, the villanous vicar is abroad in the chase this dark night: the stone Priest steals more venison then half the country.
5. We shall anon; z'ounds, hark! What means this noise?
6. I hear footmen too.
7. Sister, speak softly, or we are descried.
They are hard upon us, what so ere they be,
Shadow your self behind this brake of fern,
We'll get into the wood, and let them pass.
8. Be not afraid, man, I heard Brian's tongue,
That's certain.
9. Milliscent!
10. I told you it was Brian.
11. Brian, how hapd'st thou on her?
12. They were these stealers that affrighted us;
I was hard upon them, when they horst their Deer,
And I perceive they took me for a keeper.
13. Peace, that's my father's voice.
Thanks and don't worry, usually the scripts are more comprehensive and easy than this one. You really jumped in deep into a difficult project for your first. From now on it can only get easier
Sonia
