Lynnet wrote: ↑February 1st, 2021, 9:57 am
Chapter 13 is ready for PL.
For some reason, I had a lot of trouble with this chapter... I kept falling over my teeth
It was not as smooth in all instances as your other work, it's true, but very good nonetheless. There is only one little thing at 11:39 about which I will leave to you to decide.
Lynnet wrote: ↑February 26th, 2021, 10:24 am
Chapter 17 is ready for PL. Surely it's too early for all their problems to be over Methinks more twists are to come
I was taught that classical tragedy always put the climax in the center. (I never fully understood that.) Modern preferences seem always to head toward the cliffhanger!
Lynnet wrote: ↑February 26th, 2021, 10:24 am
Chapter 17 is ready for PL. Surely it's too early for all their problems to be over Methinks more twists are to come
PL OK!
There is the slightest stumble at 48:42. I think you should ignore it, but I wasn't sure if you would want to hear about it.