Marya999 wrote: ↑December 19th, 2020, 3:59 pmThanks for the encouragement, Sonia! This was fun
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I did a few versions of the omnes lines and wasn't sure which would sound best with the other characters- so I just left them in.
thank you Marya
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Villers is still excellent till the end.
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And yes, Todd can choose the one he likes best if you cannot decide
I have only two small notes, actually concerning the Omnes lines:
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from 3:05-3:11: "hahaha" - so cool that you didn't forget the ALL lines, but here actually Villers is
not on stage when the others laugh, so this part
could be cut out (sorry about that)
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from 3:54-4:01: "joy joy joy" - here Villers is rightly included, as he has appeared on stage by that time. Could you just
place it to time stamp 3:30 (where there already is one example of this line) ? It will make it easier for our editor if all the quotes are in the correct order.
Also careful sometimes when
stage directions are inside your sentences, there you should also
leave more space for Todd to copy&paste. Very often you did it, but sometimes you forgot. No need to change it this time, I just mention it for further plays.
thanks
Sonia