COMPLETE [SOLO]A Broken Bond by Nicholas Carter-mas

geoffbl · Post by **geoffbl** » November 17th, 2020, 1:28 am

Hi Lora,
Please find chapter 3 ready for PL.

Thanks for 1 & 2

ADKreader1122 · Post by **ADKreader1122** » November 17th, 2020, 12:14 pm

Thanks for letting me know about the introductory information. PL Okay for Chapter 3.

Lora

geoffbl · Post by **geoffbl** » November 19th, 2020, 2:40 am

Hi Lora,
Please find chapter 4 ready for PL

ADKreader1122 · Post by **ADKreader1122** » November 20th, 2020, 5:07 pm

Hello--
Chapter #4 is PL Okay. It's going well, Geoff!

Lora

geoffbl · Post by **geoffbl** » November 22nd, 2020, 3:15 am

Hi Lora, Please find Chapter 5 ready for PL

Yes , I am enjoying enjoying it.

ADKreader1122 · Post by **ADKreader1122** » November 23rd, 2020, 12:57 pm

PL Okay for Chapter 5. Lora

geoffbl · Post by **geoffbl** » November 24th, 2020, 2:08 am

Hi Lora,
Please find Chapter 6 ready for PL

ADKreader1122 · Post by **ADKreader1122** » November 24th, 2020, 1:49 pm

Hi Geoff,
For Chapter 6 there are two PL notes--please review/fix if you agree. At 5:30 the phrase ...he snarled, "You would, you would!" should be "You would, would you!" and at 7:05 in the phrase "...he felt a strange admiration.....loyalty..." the word "unflattering" should be changed to "unfaltering."

Thanks,
Lora

geoffbl · Post by **geoffbl** » November 25th, 2020, 2:59 am

Hi Lora,
Thanks for picking up those mistakes , I don't know how I missed them . I have uploaded a new Chapter 6 file with them fixed ready for your approval.

geoffbl · Post by **geoffbl** » November 27th, 2020, 5:00 am

Hi Lora,
Chapter 7 ready for PL

ADKreader1122 · Post by **ADKreader1122** » November 28th, 2020, 1:40 pm

Hello Geoff,
Please tell me if these PL notes are okay--I don't want to be too picky or detailed. I will continue as I am doing now if you would like. Whatever you think is fine with me.

For Chapter 7:
4:07 "beside" should be "behind" in "...took his seat behind the desk.
6:06 change "standing" to "stamping" in "...stamping ground"
6:56 "That was..." should be "That's" in "That's very interesting..."
8:49 change "played" to "playing" in "playing over his caller's face."

Many thanks,
Lora

geoffbl · Post by **geoffbl** » November 28th, 2020, 3:56 pm

Hi Lora,
Thanks for these . I will fix them up and let you know. Please keep up the good work you are doing, I should be reading the words that are there and not making up my own.

geoffbl · Post by **geoffbl** » November 28th, 2020, 8:05 pm

ADKreader1122 wrote: ↑November 28th, 2020, 1:40 pm Hello Geoff,
Please tell me if these PL notes are okay--I don't want to be too picky or detailed. I will continue as I am doing now if you would like. Whatever you think is fine with me.

For Chapter 7:
4:07 "beside" should be "behind" in "...took his seat behind the desk.
6:06 change "standing" to "stamping" in "...stamping ground"
6:56 "That was..." should be "That's" in "That's very interesting..."
8:49 change "played" to "playing" in "playing over his caller's face."

Many thanks,
Lora

Hi Lora,
I have updated the file with my changes ready for your to check . On the second one I did say stamping ground but it was not very clear so good work in picking that up.

Now onto recording some more

ADKreader1122 · Post by **ADKreader1122** » December 1st, 2020, 8:00 pm

Chapter 7 is PL Okay, Geoff.

Lora

geoffbl · Post by **geoffbl** » December 2nd, 2020, 3:06 am

Hi Lora ,
Chapter 8 is ready for PL

Many thanks , Geoff