COMPLETE[PLAY]Civilian Clothes by Buchanan - thw

Post by **ToddHW** » October 29th, 2020, 11:09 am

Given you a one month extension.

Thanks, Todd

benderca · Post by **benderca** » October 29th, 2020, 1:55 pm

Thanks!

alanmapstone · Post by **alanmapstone** » October 31st, 2020, 3:36 am

Lanham act 2 revised

https://librivox.org/uploads/toddhw/civilianclothes_mrlanham_2.mp3

I like the line where he tells Florence not to bully her mother. He knows them both so well

Post by **ToddHW** » October 31st, 2020, 5:19 am

Thank you.

Todd

Post by **Kitty** » October 31st, 2020, 6:37 am

alanmapstone wrote: ↑October 31st, 2020, 3:36 amLanham act 2 revised

https://librivox.org/uploads/toddhw/civilianclothes_mrlanham_2.mp3

I like the line where he tells Florence not to bully her mother. He knows them both so well

haha yes, maybe he is under their thumb a bit as well

Everything well inserted. I like the conversational tone you do in the group discussion

Thanks, all of Lanham now PL ok.

Sonia

Post by **ToddHW** » November 5th, 2020, 6:24 am

Some orphans.

Thanks, Todd

OooThatsNifty · Post by **OooThatsNifty** » November 25th, 2020, 11:23 pm

Hello! Sorry for the delay, and thanks again for the extension - here's Billy Arkwright:

Act 1:
https://librivox.org/uploads/toddhw/civilianclothes_billyarkwright_1_128kb.mp3
Time: 17:44

Act 2:
https://librivox.org/uploads/toddhw/civilianclothes_billyarkwright_2_128kb.mp3
Time: 7:40

Act 3:
https://librivox.org/uploads/toddhw/civilianclothes_billyarkwright_3_128kb.mp3
Time: 2:21

Wasn't sure if you wanted AEF abbreviated or read in full for the character intro, so I gave you both. Let me know if anything needs an edit, or if you have any CC / redirects / etc. Thanks!

Post by **ToddHW** » November 26th, 2020, 5:09 am

Thank you.

Todd

Post by **Kitty** » November 27th, 2020, 6:15 am

OooThatsNifty wrote: ↑November 25th, 2020, 11:23 pmHello! Sorry for the delay, and thanks again for the extension - here's Billy Arkwright:

thank you Andrew, you really got right into character with poor Billy. I pity the boy, he didn't get a chance throughout the play.

I love the portrayal you made here, trying to overplay his insecurities with roughness at one point in act 2 (which completely failed

). And slightly tipsy too, well conveyed.

I enjoyed the whole performance, this will sound great once assembled.

Act 3 is straight PL ok.

I have a few notes for the other two acts though:

for Act 1:

> at 17:35: (p. 36) repeat "yes sir, good afternoon" – is there one version you prefer, then you can cut out the other, unless you prefer Todd to choose ? Usually we only keep one version, the one that the reader prefers.

for Act 2:

> at 2:00: (p. 70) repeat "No" – also here, one version you prefer ?

> at about 2:40: (p. 71) missed line: "Oh !"

> at 3:25: (p. 74) repeat "Yes, yes"

> at about 4:20: (p. 76) missed line: "Thought you'd never get here !"

thank you

Sonia

OooThatsNifty · Post by **OooThatsNifty** » November 27th, 2020, 4:00 pm

Kitty wrote: ↑November 27th, 2020, 6:15 am thank you Andrew, you really got right into character with poor Billy. I pity the boy, he didn't get a chance throughout the play. I love the portrayal you made here, trying to overplay his insecurities with roughness at one point in act 2 (which completely failed ). And slightly tipsy too, well conveyed. I enjoyed the whole performance, this will sound great once assembled.

Act 3 is straight PL ok.

I have a few notes for the other two acts though:

for Act 1:
> at 17:35: (p. 36) repeat "yes sir, good afternoon" – is there one version you prefer, then you can cut out the other, unless you prefer Todd to choose ? Usually we only keep one version, the one that the reader prefers.

for Act 2:
> at 2:00: (p. 70) repeat "No" – also here, one version you prefer ?
> at about 2:40: (p. 71) missed line: "Oh !"
> at 3:25: (p. 74) repeat "Yes, yes"
> at about 4:20: (p. 76) missed line: "Thought you'd never get here !"
thank you
Sonia

Thanks very much!

The repeats were just oversights while editing - I've cut the extras, and spliced in the missing lines:

https://librivox.org/uploads/toddhw/civilianclothes_billyarkwright_1_128kb.mp3
New Time: 17:41

https://librivox.org/uploads/toddhw/civilianclothes_billyarkwright_2_128kb.mp3
New Time: 7:39

Thanks again!

Post by **Kitty** » November 28th, 2020, 3:54 am

OooThatsNifty wrote: ↑November 27th, 2020, 4:00 pmThe repeats were just oversights while editing - I've cut the extras, and spliced in the missing lines:

https://librivox.org/uploads/toddhw/civilianclothes_billyarkwright_1_128kb.mp3
New Time: 17:41

https://librivox.org/uploads/toddhw/civilianclothes_billyarkwright_2_128kb.mp3
New Time: 7:39

perfect now and PL ok, thank you

That's another big role in the box

Sonia

benderca · Post by **benderca** » November 28th, 2020, 2:09 pm

I‘ve got both my acts recorded, but I‘ll need about another week to finish the editing.
Thanks,
TJ

benderca · Post by **benderca** » November 30th, 2020, 6:08 pm

Here's the charming Mrs. Lanham -- yet another character I've played who treats her husband wonderfully (sorry again, Alan

):

https://librivox.org/uploads/toddhw/civilianclothes_mrslanham_1_128kb.mp3

I've added some sighs should you choose to use them:
At 4:10 I've added a sigh for "Mrs. Lanham sighs with relief."
At 6:05 I've added a breath intake and sigh for "Mrs. Lanham and Elizabeth sink back in horror.

Post by **ToddHW** » November 30th, 2020, 7:07 pm

Thank you.

Todd

Post by **Kitty** » December 1st, 2020, 5:46 am

benderca wrote: ↑November 30th, 2020, 6:08 pmHere's the charming Mrs. Lanham -- yet another character I've played who treats her husband wonderfully (sorry again, Alan ):

yes, poor Alan, constantly called "ridiculous" by you

but I already heard Alan's character, he seems to take the jibes of his wife in his stride.

Excellent job, TJ. I loved it very much. And it's absolutely PL ok.

Thank you, now looking forward to the second act

Sonia