Nicely done. Are you using Audacity? If so please select View>Show clipping. Now you should see a number of red lines scattered throughout your reading. This is when you would louder than than the program could record. Too much clipping leads to distortion so it's something to keep an eye on.
For this recording, please make the following corrections:
3:54 repeat - p15. ...he feels a trust committed to him to keep
and fulfils it.
5:49 word change p16. which is self-sustained as it is self-derived
6:11 repeat - the
9:16 word change p18. ...but that she existed for her people, and the quick
and tender open-minded sympathy...
10:51 stumble p19. ...or creatures whose bodies answer as readily to the ruling of the spirit as does the ship to
11:03 word change p19. We all know the child
who is fully willing to do the right thing...
11:12 stumble p19. ...but with whom bodily vis inertia is strong
12:24 word change p20. ...in response to his own, is to make
a man of him.
12:46 word change p20. ...and it rests
with parents to give their children...
17:06 repeat - vis
18:55 word change p.23. I am not proposing a one-sided
19:50 word change p24. ...because to them it means quiet rest and gaiety
Extend ending silence to 5 seconds. At the current 3.5 seconds there is a risk of being cut off during playback.
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