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Post by williamjones » August 2nd, 2019, 3:18 pm

Blackbird is, not surprisingly PL OK!
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Post by msfry » August 2nd, 2019, 3:22 pm

williamjones wrote:
August 2nd, 2019, 3:12 pm
Corrected and uploaded
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Post by williamjones » August 2nd, 2019, 6:59 pm

msfry wrote:
August 2nd, 2019, 3:22 pm
williamjones wrote:
August 2nd, 2019, 3:12 pm
Corrected and uploaded
lovestories1_anangelindisguise_arthur_wj_128kb 19:47 (no change)
No link here.
Uploaded it again because I don't know how to find an earlier upload.
https://librivox.org/uploads/philchenevert/lovestories1_anangelindisguise_arthur_wj_128kb.mp3 19:47
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{NO WE WON'T !!}

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Post by williamjones » August 3rd, 2019, 4:38 am

Bill Jones, Fabled of Story and Song, CC
This year thousands of men will die from stubbornness.
{NO WE WON'T !!}

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Post by williamjones » August 3rd, 2019, 5:21 am

Bill Jones, Fabled of Story and Song, CC
This year thousands of men will die from stubbornness.
{NO WE WON'T !!}

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Post by msfry » August 3rd, 2019, 7:05 am

Angel In Disguise is PL OK.

Thank you for The Gift of the Magi and The Last Leaf. I look forward to listening to these wonderful love stories.
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Post by KevinS » August 3rd, 2019, 7:50 pm

E agora, José?

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Post by msfry » August 4th, 2019, 7:22 am

PL Notes The Last Leaf

Behrman's masterpiece! Awwww.

A few notes:
7:55 bending over her, you say here
10:50 red eyes, plainly streaming, you say steaming. Steaming eyes? Ouch!

I see you changed Sudie to Susie, probably thinking it was an OCR error in the gutenberg text, but it is also Sudie in these renditions:
http://www.online-literature.com/o_henry/1303/
http://www.eastoftheweb.com/short-stories/UBooks/LasLea.shtml
So, I think that's what O. Henry meant for Sue's nickname, to indicate affection, or perhaps delerium. Leave it, or fix it. O. Henry fans might care, that's all.
Occurrences at 6:30, 7:22, 14:50, 15:15
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Post by msfry » August 4th, 2019, 1:16 pm

PL Notes Gift of the Magi

1:20 mendicancy squad, you say mendi-sansy, should be mendi-kancy (mendicant)
14:36 that of all who give gifts, you say gave. The last 3 sentences are all a summing up of Magi wisdom about giving for all time, all present tense.
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Post by williamjones » August 4th, 2019, 1:40 pm

msfry wrote:
August 4th, 2019, 7:22 am
PL Notes The Last Leaf

Behrman's masterpiece! Awwww.

A few notes:
7:55 bending over her, you say here
10:50 red eyes, plainly streaming, you say steaming. Steaming eyes? Ouch!

I see you changed Sudie to Susie, probably thinking it was an OCR error in the gutenberg text,
<snip>
Uploaded correct Version
https://librivox.org/uploads/philchenevert/lovestories1_thelastleaf_ohenry_wj_128kb.mp3 17:30

I choose to let the Susie references stand as recorded.
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Post by williamjones » August 4th, 2019, 1:49 pm

msfry wrote:
August 4th, 2019, 1:16 pm
PL Notes Gift of the Magi

1:20 mendicancy squad, you say mendi-sansy, should be mendi-kancy (mendicant)
14:36 that of all who give gifts, you say gave. The last 3 sentences are all a summing up of Magi wisdom about giving for all time, all present tense.
Uploaded The Gift of the Magi after fixing the two errors:

https://librivox.org/uploads/philchenevert/lovestories1_thegiftofthemagi_ohenry_wj_128kb.mp3 14:58
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{NO WE WON'T !!}

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Post by msfry » August 5th, 2019, 3:37 pm

Leaf and Gift are PL OK. Thanks for your contributions of these two favorite stories.
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Post by msfry » August 6th, 2019, 12:23 pm

PL Notes The Horse Dealer's Daughter

Quintessential Lawrence!!!!! Thanks for this contribution. Dr. Strange Love, eh? Now, as to my notes:

7:15 with his knees stuck out, you say struck
15:44 Why should she answer to anybody? You added to, which I recommend you delete to, for the story only says "she doesn't talk to anybody."
16:29 saddened dark green fields, you say satin
31:49 And something stubborn in him could not give away, stubborn is missing.
39:42 to rub himself down and dress, down is missing
40:02 dress of black voile, you say foil. Dressed in foil?

Beginning and end, the piece seems to say "The Horse Stealer's Daughter". I have a forum post called "word slurs" with a collection of my own slurs, and a few people have added more in. I hope you will consider adding this one here:
viewtopic.php?f=24&t=69510&p=1484222&hilit=word+slurs#p1484222

And fixing it here!
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Post by KevinS » August 6th, 2019, 12:40 pm

Horse Stealer's Daughter! Hard to say, "I meant to say that!" Hahah!
E agora, José?

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Post by msfry » August 6th, 2019, 1:01 pm

KevinS wrote:
August 6th, 2019, 12:40 pm
Horse Stealer's Daughter! Hard to say, "I meant to say that!" Hahah!
Fair trading, would you have time to PL my upcoming contribution, Don Rodriguez 6th Chronicle? 36:00
There will be no rush on that, though it is quite chivalric and a charming love story I think you will enjoy.
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