thank you, Larry, yay another lengthy act in the box. And you really get carried away by the mayhem, especially at the end
this will be a lot of bustling about all through the act
I'm curious how it all will sound.
I found a few errors and missing lines, but not too many, considering how long it was:
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at 2:39: “
next to old Arthur” – this is definitely Cooling speaking, not the narrator
can be cut
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at about 4:26: missed line: “
Reading”
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at about 4:40: missed line: “
Roper whistles”
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at 6:02: missed line: “
Smythe, a silk hat on the back of his head, an overcoat on his arm—regarding the preparations with disgust.” instead you have another line here, starting with “
von Rettenmayer enters at the door….” which
can be cut as it’s repeated at the right spot at 8:10
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at about 18:21: missed line: “
shaking hands”
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at about 21:17: missed line: “
Smythe to Lily”
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at about 28:23: missed line: “
To Roper”
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at about 28:28: missed line: “
singing”
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at about 32:17: missed line: “
bowing to Mrs Stidulph”
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at 34:57: Lily: “
to the others” – this is Lily speaking,
can be cut
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at 35:07: “another
follows with the ices” – you forgot “
follows” which makes it sound a bit strange
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at 42:19: Lily walks away
from Farncombe – you say “walks away
with”
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at 48:47: “out at the right-hand door
at the back” – you say “
and back”
thanks
Sonia
PL ok. Congrats to your first stage role (at least here on LV)
yes, like TJ said: warm-up practices might help
yay, please do !!!! Looking forward to that. Glad you enjoyed it.