Then there we just a couple of (very minor and optional) things I noticed.TULLY (rushes across stage in front of table and arm-chair, with MAMIE’S sunshade raised in a threatening manner). John! John!
JOHN (kneeling to TULLY—pleadingly). Bertram! Bertram!!
TULLY (TULLY’S face relaxes and develops into a broad smile). Oh, John! John!! (Giggles.)
At 0:34 the line is "We-we never count John as anyone." You missed the stutter and just said "We never count John as anyone." This is really so minor that I almost didn't mention it, and if there hadn't been any missed lines, I wouldn't have. It's up to you, I think, whether or not to revisit this line. I just love how adorably awkward Tully is!
I also heard a strange crackle/click a few times. Examples are at about 8:45, 10:30, 10:35. I'm not sure what would cause this. It's very minor, and not bad enough that you need to re-record anything. But you may want to watch for it in the future.
Overall, extremely well done. I look forward to hearing the rest.