rpotenza wrote: ↑October 7th, 2018, 1:40 pmMy thanks to Branden David Kosch's August 2017 doctoral dissertation "Reading Demosthenes" which I used as my study guide. It was a huge help for me to understand the "Second Olynthiac".
I just had a listen to this and first of all: WOW
I really felt like I was listening to one of the old orators giving his harangue in the forum. Not only the sound quality, which differed from the editor's notes, but your diction and expressiveness gave this effect. It was a wonderful section to listen to and although it was a very difficult text, you mastered it brilliantly.
That said, I fear you handed in the unedited file, because I found quite a few repeats and long pauses which still need to be edited out. Here are all my notes. The best thing is to start
correcting from the last note and work your way up to the first, that way the time stamps will stay the same.
A special note for the pauses in-between. It's wonderful not to rush through a text, especially if it such a great oration as this. But any break over 1.8 or even 2 seconds or more will feel quite long to a listener. I personally feel that 1.5 seconds is fully enough. So I mentioned all the places where to me at least the pause felt too long. Maybe you could cut down a bit on those.
It may look like a long list, but textually you were word perfect, so there is no need for any re-recording, it's just a matter of cutting out things.
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volume is over 93 dB, which is much too loud. We accept between 86 and 92 dB. Please decrease volume by
-3 dB.
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beginning you have
over 1 second silence, usually 0.5-1 second maximum is enough (optional for this time though, just mentioning it for completeness sake
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from 1:33 till 1:47: here is a lengthy break of 14 seconds which is really too much. Listeners will think the recording broke off
Could you please reduce this down to 1 or 1.5 seconds, which is fully enough ?
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at 2:52-2:54 – before “now let your interest direct you” - long pause
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at 3:00-3:02 – before “what season” - long pause
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at 3:09: (p. 186)
repetition of “or when will you exert your vigour” – can be
cut out once
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at 4:05-4:07: before “yes I know full well” – long pause
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at 4:59-5:03: (p. 186)
stumble and repeat “does not – does another offer some more salutary counsel” – can be
cut out once
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at 5:41: (p. 187)
stumble and repeat “so that / to that” – can be
cut out
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at 5:46-5:49: before “The orater contrasts” - long pause
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at 6:00-6:03: before “but if you will at lengh” - long pause
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at 6:58-7:02: (p. 187)
stumble and repeat “what then, is it your opinion” – can be
cut out once
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at 7:22-7:24: before “is it in his power” - long pause
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at 8:54-9:02: (p. 188)
stumble and repeat “listening to the exploits of some general’s foreign troops” – can be
cut out
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from 9:50-10:02: 12 seconds between final sentence and end disclaimer, also
1.5-2 seconds is fully enough
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at 10:07: at the
end of your recording please leave only the
standard 5 seconds of silence, you have over 11 seconds here
that's all.
Thank your for this great oration experience. It was really something.
Sonia
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Interesting to read about the conflicting doubts Caesar had that night, before he made that fateful decision to cross.