Corrected SubmissionsLmnei wrote: ↑August 19th, 2018, 5:26 pm Hi Clarkson!
As there is no DPL yet I have reviewed your poems for you. They were really great to listen to! You have done a wonderful job of recording them and I can hear your passion when recording which is great!
Here is the feedback for each section -
Section 2
1:18 – mien – should be like meen – rhymes with queen in sentence below
2:49 – I heard untreating eyes – should be entreating eyes
Please leave closer to 5 seconds at the end of the poem.
Section 3
56.5 – heard sweetest – should be sweet
Section 5
1:38 – heard wildness – should be wilderness
2:14 – heard Her dreams – should be He dreams
Please leave closer to 5 seconds at the end of the poem.
Section 6
Your volume is just a bit below the range at 85.9 dB – use Amplify to get it closer to 89 dB please - if you need help just let me know!
Reading is perfect.
Section 7
Your volume is just a bit below the range at 85.9 dB – use Amplify to get it closer to 89 dB - same as above
There are 2 more verses that were not read on page 25 that need to be appended to the end of the poem please.
I am not sure if all the bracketed portions of Part 3 need to be whispered - I can see it for the first verse however I generally do not whisper bracketed sections - I just read them normally as whispering can be hard to understand or hear. It is up to you though as the reader - I was just sharing what I generally do.
So if you can make those minor changes then post the links and new times Carolin will be able to update the Magic Window and someone will Spot Check them so they can get approved.
It was a pleasure listening to your work.
Lynda
2 - The Houses of Sin - 3:28 - https://librivox.org/uploads/carolin/housesofsin_02_osullivan_128kb.mp3
3 - Malaria - 1:07 - https://librivox.org/uploads/carolin/housesofsin_03_osullivan_128kb.mp3
5 - The Verge - 2:28 - https://librivox.org/uploads/carolin/housesofsin_05_osullivan_128kb.mp3
6 - Drug - 1:03 - https://librivox.org/uploads/carolin/housesofsin_06_osullivan_128kb.mp3
7 - Three Moments - 3:04 - https://librivox.org/uploads/carolin/housesofsin_07_osullivan_128kb.mp3