interesting comparison
well thank you for this excellent voice-acting, Tina, you really gave Lucas quite a character and I think the dialogues with Agnes will be very cool when assembled. I like your husky voice in some parts, it almost makes him sound a bit threatening. It gives him a touch of a "not so nice person", which I think Agnes will find out in the end anyway. Quite well done to subtly hint at it like this.
I have a few notes to correct for you, before it's ready to go though. The most important being the request to be careful with the pauses between your quotes. Near the end you really leave enough space for the editor to copy/paste the chunks, but in the beginning, sometimes you only leave half a second, this makes it really hard for Todd to fiddle with. Could you please leave at least 2 seconds in your next acts. Especially careful when there are stage directions inside your speech. You also need to leave a long pause there.
> there are also a couple of technical issues: your
bitrate is variable, but we need it at “
128 kbps constant”. You can set that while exporting to mp3 in the Options section, if you are using Audacity
> concerning the
volume: most of the time it's a bit too soft. For example all the speeches in the 9th minute are barely a whisper, under 80 dB, while near the end you are clipping your speech because the volume is too loud. The volume will get adjusted by the editor later on anyway, still it would be good if you tried to stay as close
inside our 86-92 dB limit as possible. This will also make it easier for Todd later on. For this act it's probably ok, but I'm mentioning it for the next acts
> oh and a minor detail, in the
filename, we usually
don't use capital letters, but that is not so important, as your file will get deleted anyway, once the parts are pasted into the masterfile.
here now the time stamps, where the corrections would be located. A good idea is to start at the end, so the time stamps will stay the same
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at 0:01: could you please also give us a voice-credit: “
Lucas Cleeve, read by Tina” or whatever name you want to be credited by
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at 0:10: “Isn’t it?” – could you please leave
at least 2 seconds of silence here to make it easier to insert the stage directions [to Agnes]
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at 2:40: “He’s within hail” – please leave
more space
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at 5:18: “Lord Froom” -
more space
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at 5:57: “to all of this” -
more space
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at 7:03-7:05: “I couldn't foresee that I was doomed to pay the price all nervous men pay for success; that the greater my success became” – here
you can cut the long pause, as no stage directions are interrupting your speech
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at about 9:50: missing quote:
“Yes ?”
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at 11:30: “He throws his head back and laughs heartily” – there’s a
disturbing noise in this sentence, something clacking loudly. Could you re-record that sentence please ?
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at 11:33: “O, of course….” – again, leave
more space for stage directions
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at 11:48: “End of the first act” – this
can be cut out, as it’s the narrator who will be reading this
thank you, and I'm looking forward to the next part
Sonia