COMPLETE Christmas Eve and Other Poems by Stebbins -ck

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Ealswythe wrote:No rush, Larry. My internet is down right now. I can only use my phone. Downed power line in front of my house.
We just got our power back, but part of our town and area are still without Huge wind storm, but nothing like Houston, Miami, or Puerto Rico.
~ Larry
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Here is my reading.
https://librivox.org/uploads/carolin/christmaseve_08_stebbins_128kb.mp3 2:41
I like to appear as Monica Washington in the Librivox catalog

thanks
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aunrietta wrote:Here is my reading.
https://librivox.org/uploads/carolin/christmaseve_08_stebbins_128kb.mp3 2:41
I like to appear as Monica Washington in the Librivox catalog

thanks
Hello Monica, and welcome to Librivox! We are very happy to have you in this project!

First of all, may I say that you have the sweetest, most musical voice, which lends itself perfectly to poetry. You read so clearly, maintaining poetic meter, yet never missing the emotion of the words, drawing the listener in with your story. :clap:

I have one very small note:

at 1:38 The text reads "more faint and far". I hear "fair." The word "far" goes with "faint", as for example, "She was so far away that her words sounded faint to me."

In addition, since you will have to edit that one word to say "far", you could remove just 2 seconds at the end of the recording. It's no big deal, and I wouldn't even mention it if you didn't have that one tiny bit of editing to do. The rule of thumb is 5 seconds at the end and you have about 7. I'm being picky, yes? :twisted:

However, I am so very impressed at the quality of your recording, and how clean it is. This is your first recording?? You will be fantastically popular in all our projects! :clap:

As soon as you edit per these notes, you are set for this recording! :D

Carolin, please note that she would like her name to appear as Monica Washington in the catalog.
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Thank you all so much :D
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And i have edited your catalog page, monica, https://librivox.org/reader/11929 :)
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Hello , thanks for the feed back, it was very valuable. :)
Here is the link to the reading redone.

https://librivox.org/uploads/carolin/christmaseve_08_stebbins_128kb.mp3 2:38

Thanks
Monica Washington
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aunrietta wrote:Hello , thanks for the feed back, it was very valuable. :)
Here is the link to the reading redone.

https://librivox.org/uploads/carolin/christmaseve_08_stebbins_128kb.mp3 2:38

Thanks
Monica Washington
Thank you so much, Monica! It is perfectly edited, and PL OK now!
:thumbs:

I'll update the MW.
I hope you're choosing claims in other projects. You do excellent work! :clap:
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Here is the title poem.

https://librivox.org/uploads/carolin/christmaseve_01_stebbins_128kb.mp3 14:14

It's a long one, so don't be too hard on me :wink:
~ Larry
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silverquill wrote:Here is the title poem.

https://librivox.org/uploads/carolin/christmaseve_01_stebbins_128kb.mp3 14:14

It's a long one, so don't be too hard on me :wink:
Thank you, Larry. I’ll get to this tomorrow morning. I promise I won’t be too hard on you! :D
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Thank you all!
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Ealswythe wrote:
silverquill wrote:Here is the title poem.

https://librivox.org/uploads/carolin/christmaseve_01_stebbins_128kb.mp3 14:14

It's a long one, so don't be too hard on me :wink:
Thank you, Larry. I’ll get to this tomorrow morning. I promise I won’t be too hard on you! :D
Hello, Larry,
First of all, let me commend you again for the clarity of your voice, sensitive delivery, and the ability to communicate the full meaning of the poem to the listener. Poetry is a difficult medium to put across, but you do it with naturalness, as if you had written it yourself. In addition, your voice matches the era of the poem.

:D I promised I would be easy on you. I will. This was a marathon poem, and it's not easy to see the text in that scanned online copy. There were several places where you placed a "the" where there wan't "the", and one time, you said "banks" instead of "bank." (as in the bank of a river.) Sometimes you made a word plural that was singular or vice versa, but I don't feel that any of these things change the meaning or flow of the poem in any way, so I'm not going to have you change them. :D
:oops: Here are sections that do need editing:

1:36: "The winter on austere and scanty fare". You say "or".
2:49: "And forgot the sensual tie.." You say "forget"

4:26-4:42: You repeat this entire section later, at 4:42-4:57, obviously, because you were correcting your mistake of saying "where" instead of "whence." All you need to do here is delete the first section at 4:26-4:42.

6:55: "upon its pulsing wings.." You say "pushing." Here, if I may give you a little suggestion: edit only from the section starting at "pulsing wings.." because I don't want you to tamper with the lovely melancholy in your voice that you have in the section immediately before it. Your emotional delivery brought tears to my eyes. Well acted!

11:31: "in many a narrow and steep ravine".. You say "to".

11:35: "the slumbering echoes at his steps awoke". You say "of".

I hope I haven't been too hard on you. If I'm being too picky, please let me know. :oops:

I love your narration, and I hope I am being of some help.
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Thank you :thumbs:
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~ Larry
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Thank you, Larry!
These are now
PL OK :thumbs:
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Post by silverquill »

And, this is a fresh recording of Christmas Eve. Just a couple of misreadings that I think should pass. Voice a little rough, but I hope still effective, and a bit shorter.

https://librivox.org/uploads/carolin/christmaseve_01_stebbins_128kb.mp3 13:32
~ Larry
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