Well done, Ian! My only comment is that you have several instances where you corrected yourself but left the incorrect version of your reading in the recording. These should be deleted. I heard three instances:
21:28 The word "shroud" is repeated
21:56 The word "poor" is repeated
24:23 The word "in" is repeated
Editing tip: start with the last one (24:23), delete the incorrect version, then back up to 21:56 and fix that one, then do the one at 21:28. By working in reverse order the earlier times remain correct while you edit the later ones.