[Complete] Dear Brutus - dlo

Post by **dlolso21** » August 22nd, 2014, 8:54 am

Elizabby wrote: (Is Act 3 ready for PL?)

Act 3 has one line for Matey missing and could probably use a bit more adjusting volumes. Go ahead with PL; I wouldn't want to hold you back in suspense after you have listened to the rest.

Shakira · Post by **Shakira** » August 22nd, 2014, 2:24 pm

Okay, my two corrections - hopefully the last for this piece!

Act 1 correction ("clucks" rather than "ducks" as spotted by Beth):
https://librivox.org/uploads/dlolso21/dearbrutus_narration_1_clucksvictoriously_128kb.mp3
Length: 0:19

Act 3 correction (MATEY: remembering certain newspaper jealousy):
https://librivox.org/uploads/dlolso21/dearbrutus_narration_3_addendum_128kb.mp3
Length: 0:08

Post by **dlolso21** » August 22nd, 2014, 3:15 pm

Beth & Shakira,

Thank you both!

Act 1b now has Lob "clucks victoriously"
Act 2 now has additional silence at the end.
Act 3 now has "jealousy" - I changed this one, though I thought I heard the y in it

Latest versions are now uploaded.

David O

Shakira · Post by **Shakira** » August 22nd, 2014, 3:30 pm

dlolso21 wrote: Act 3 now has "jealousy" - I changed this one, though I thought I heard the y in it

I did my best to cut out the "l" in the waveform, but I didn't think it worked that well. Maybe I was just hyper-aware of it?

Elizabby · Post by **Elizabby** » August 22nd, 2014, 3:43 pm

dlolso21 wrote: Act 2 now has additional silence at the end.

OK, I have PLed your additional 10 seconds of silence. It was very, um, silent.

ACT 2 is now PL OK!

Also, does anyone know the time stamp at which the "clucks victoriously" bit was inserted? Would make it easier to find than trying to find it in the text.

Post by **dlolso21** » August 22nd, 2014, 4:02 pm

Elizabby wrote: Also, does anyone know the time stamp at which the "clucks victoriously" bit was inserted? Would make it easier to find than trying to find it in the text.

@10:45 is the start of the Narrator phrase "There is a general exodus ..."

Elizabby · Post by **Elizabby** » August 22nd, 2014, 10:12 pm

dlolso21 wrote: Act 1b now has Lob "clucks victoriously"

Act 1b is now PL OK - nice cluck, Shakira!

Ooh, I have access to the MW! Nice!

MW is updated!

Elizabby · Post by **Elizabby** » August 23rd, 2014, 12:16 am

Act 3 PL notes:

@11:31 Joanna's first phrase missing "I daresay" directly ahead of "but not with each other". (Doesn't change the meaning.)

@19:11 Joanna's line is incorrect (it is a repeat of "won't it be delicious..." from earlier) Line should be "We don't know. How awful!"

@24:00 (the line missing from Matey that you already know about "The gentleman seems to be reposing.")

Outro is perfect and has 10 seconds of silence at the end after it!

Post by **dlolso21** » August 23rd, 2014, 3:47 am

Thank you, Beth for the PL notes. Joanna's lines were editing mistakes on my part and have been corrected - no re-recording is necessary.

Elizabby wrote:Act 3 PL notes:

@11:31 Joanna's first phrase missing "I daresay" directly ahead of "but not with each other". (Doesn't change the meaning.)

@19:11 Joanna's line is incorrect (it is a repeat of "won't it be delicious..." from earlier) Line should be "We don't know. How awful!"

Act 3 with Joanna's lines corrected is uploading and available for Spot PL.

David O

Post by **dlolso21** » August 23rd, 2014, 4:00 am

There appear to be only two lines still missing. I posted in the forum and sent a PM to both readers on July 31st; both PMs show they were read. I am posting here and sending another PM as a reminder. If there is no response we may have to either find a substitute voice for the lines or leave them out.

Act 1 Part 2
@36:49 missing line
Mr Dearth. "Perhaps if we had had children—Pity!"

Act 3 PL notes:
@24:00 missing line
Matey. "The gentleman seems to be reposing.

Elizabby · Post by **Elizabby** » August 25th, 2014, 5:25 am

My opinion (for what little it may be worth) is that the Act 3 line by Matey could fairly easily be omitted without losing any significant meaning. However the Act 1 line by Mr Dearth is important to the plot and I think someone needs to say it. If the original reader doesn't come back, I think it would be very hard to get a good voice match. Could the narrator read it and say something like "Mr Dearth reflects..."?

Elizabby · Post by **Elizabby** » August 25th, 2014, 5:29 am

dlolso21 wrote:Thank you, Beth for the PL notes. Joanna's lines were editing mistakes on my part and have been corrected - no re-recording is necessary.

Elizabby wrote:Act 3 PL notes:

@11:31 Joanna's first phrase missing "I daresay" directly ahead of "but not with each other". (Doesn't change the meaning.)

@19:11 Joanna's line is incorrect (it is a repeat of "won't it be delicious..." from earlier) Line should be "We don't know. How awful!"
Act 3 with Joanna's lines corrected is uploading and available for Spot PL.

David O

These corrections are now PL OK - we are just looking for those two missing lines and I think we are all done here!

balaonspace · Post by **balaonspace** » August 25th, 2014, 12:32 pm

Here is the missing line for matey

https://librivox.org/uploads/dlolso21/dearbrutus_matey_missingline.mp3

cheers

Post by **dlolso21** » August 25th, 2014, 1:12 pm

Thank you very much, Bala!

I have marked your section PL OK in the MW.

I will splice it in later today and update the MW for Act 3 so Beth can do a spot PL on it.

Post by **dlolso21** » August 25th, 2014, 1:18 pm

Elizabby wrote:My opinion (for what little it may be worth) is that the Act 3 line by Matey could fairly easily be omitted without losing any significant meaning. However the Act 1 line by Mr Dearth is important to the plot and I think someone needs to say it. If the original reader doesn't come back, I think it would be very hard to get a good voice match. Could the narrator read it and say something like "Mr Dearth reflects..."?

I am going to wait a bit more, until 1 August, for the original reader.