Ally,
First of all, thank you for all your efforts. You do such a great job of reading this story and we all want everyone to get the best experience from your work, so there are still a couple of things that we need to work on to get it great.
21: Your noise level is still a little over 41. I took a 'snippet' of noise at about 2:05.5 and used that as the Noise Reduction Profile, and the selected the whole reading and then the numbers come out at 28. Your volume, as it is now, was 91.9, one the upper limits of standards, but by running the aforementioned Noise Reduction, it brought it down to 91.4. Still on the high end, but better. To help with the volume, go into Audacity and 'select' the entire reading, either by using Control "A" or the 'select' button at the bottom of the graph on Audacity. Then go to Effect and choose Amplify. A box with come up with two boxes with numbers in them. The top one will be highlighted in blue. To drop your volume, just enter "-" and then the number of decibels you want to decrease your recording. In your case, enter "-2.5" and then hit "OK". That should decrease the volume of your recording to very close to 89.
Another tool that I have found very useful is mp3Gain (
http://mp3gain.sourceforge.net/download.php and choose the top option). It will help you with getting the volume correct after you first save it as an mp3 file.
22: You kind of over corrected on the ending silence. It is now 7.5 seconds, a little over the five second goal. Maybe you can fix that.
23: Your beginning silence is still well over one second. I know this doesn't sound like much, half a second, but in the 'recording business' that really is a long time (relatively speaking).
Your ending time is about 3.5 seconds, which is a little shorter than the five seconds LV likes to have. The reason for that is that when someone downloads the book, and listens to your recording, sometimes there are little glitches and the beginning and ending times are there to make sure they get to hear all of your great recording without missing anything.
One other thing. One of the hardest things to do is to add or correct words after they have been submitted and have to be corrected. As I listened to your corrections, there are a couple of suggestions. Before recording it, listen to the surrounding lines and listen to what they sound like. Then record and insert those lines and then listen again to see if the 'mesh' pretty well. I know I often have to try it a couple of times, and then mess with the 'Amplify' (as noted above) to get them about the same volume. Also, it is hard to get the quality of the sound the same. In yours, it sounds like you were a lot close to the mic on the corrections than you were on the original recording. That is one advantage to listening to the corrections after you have done them and you can hear what you can do to make them even better.
Ally, DO NOT GET DISCOURAGED!!! We ALL have been through this, but like anything worthwhile that we try, there is a time of learning and improving and eventually we all get to the time when we are really having fun and enjoying what we are doing with out so much angst.
Wayne
P.S Sorry I missed these yesterday. (I was gone Sunday and Monday)