That is exactly the type of advice I was looking for and I am glad to work on those issues.TriciaG wrote: ↑June 25th, 2020, 8:05 amThank you! PL OK!
As for constructive criticism, the only two things I'll mention (and they're both minor) are these:
1) maybe a little more pause between the intro and the text, and at the end, the text and the outro. I didn't notice you rushing through changes of scene in the text itself, so that was fine, and this is a very minor quibble.
2) maybe take a little more time to inhale. Some of your breaths are a bit loud and gaspy. Not a big deal, either - but you asked for things to improve, so I pulled out this one.
Thank you very much. Vicki