thank you, Rachel, now this was a fast turn-around.
Congrats to your first recording, I hope you had fun with the author's style.
On the whole, you have done a nice reading, it was nearly word-perfect and it was well understandable throughout, the pacing not too slow and not too fast rushed. Perfect to follow along as a listener. So far so good.
There are however a few corrections that still need to be done. It doesn't require any re-recording so don't worry about the following list, it's merely some cosmetics to make the section sound smoother. I only found a few annoying clicks which can be edited out and some pauses were very long:
> the
volume is over 92 dB which is our upper limit. I would suggest
decreasing the overall volume by -2 to get to a better average of about 89 dB. Do you know how to do this ? Do you use Audacity ? Then I can give you a step-by-step
> the
background noise is a bit disturbing, but this can be cleaning in the editing phase. I would suggest
running one round of noise-cleaning. Again, in Audacity this is easily done. If you need help, please ask.
Please do the following corrections to the text. And I suggest starting at the end of the list, that way the time stamps won't change for you when you cut out some pauses
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at 0:24: between "lively matters" and "several months ago" I hear a
loud click, which could be removed
>
from 2:44-2:47: between "to dust the balusters" and "and old house is strong": the
pause here is too long. Anything over 2 seconds feels very long for a listener I find. I would cut the break down a bit, 1.5 seconds is fully enough between paragraphs.
>
from 4:23-4:25: between "these at the top of the heap" and "I choose to trace" - same here, I would
cut a bit of pause. Also I hear clicks in both pauses, so at the same time you clean these noises out a bit
>
at 7:01: between "against the world" and "encyclopedias" I hear
another loud click. Is it a chair creaking maybe ? Best take care not to move too much when you record, the microphone will pick up anything. And if you hear such noises while listening to it a second time (in the editing phase), I would cut them out, the recording sounds cleaner that way
>
at 8:55-8:56: between "hero and heroine" and "you will remember" - also here,
some clicks can be removed
>
at 11:49: between "travel by" and "furthermore" -
another click can be removed
>
at 13:57: at the end of the recording we always leave a
standard of 5 seconds of silence, so as not to stop too abruptly. Could you
add 3 more seconds here please ? You can also cut the final click in the same process
> and last but not least, careful with the
filenaming. Best to copy/paste the example from the first post, and then only change the ## into the relevant section number. Here you forgot the "
kb" at the end
> oh and as a helpful convention, please always state the
file length when you post a section. So the BC can update the MW accordingly.
thanks !
Sonia
I see you just passed your test
so now I only need to know the reader name you want to go by, then I can open your personal reader page for you and assign you the section officially. This can be your forum name or your real name, or a pseudonym, whichever you prefer.
If you click on Reader Section Details you can see which sections are still to be recorded, which have PL notes and which are PL ok. So it's a good tracking system in case you forget what you still have on your to-do-list 
How did you decrease your volume ? Maybe you did something wrong. Which editing programme are you using and what did you do ?
For me, amplifying is working just fine, but as I said, it's easier if you have the same audio wave-height all throughout the recording.