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Post by jenniferrd » November 12th, 2018, 8:51 pm

Chapter 7:
5:11 - Repeat of phrase, "So after I'd put on my hat and coat"
5:10 - Repeat of phrase, "Troop came off"
18:20 - Change in meaning: "At a few minutes after" is changed to "At a few minutes earlier" - that would be confusing as they are specifically talking of the time line of the murder
19:20 - Repeat of sentence "This man didn't attempt the job alone."

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Post by lethargilistic » November 15th, 2018, 9:16 am

jenniferrd wrote:
November 12th, 2018, 8:51 pm
Chapter 7:
5:11 - Repeat of phrase, "So after I'd put on my hat and coat"
5:10 - Repeat of phrase, "Troop came off"
18:20 - Change in meaning: "At a few minutes after" is changed to "At a few minutes earlier" - that would be confusing as they are specifically talking of the time line of the murder
19:20 - Repeat of sentence "This man didn't attempt the job alone."
5:11 - Repeat of phrase, "So after I'd put on my hat and coat"
5:16 - Repeat of phrase, "Troop came off"
18:14 - Change in meaning: "At a few minutes after" is changed to "At a few minutes earlier" - that would be confusing as they are specifically talking of the time line of the murder
19:16 - Repeat of sentence "This man didn't attempt the job alone."
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Post by jenniferrd » November 16th, 2018, 6:22 am

Chapter 9:
04:17 - missing the word "been" in "she'd been a radiant, blooming Amazon in the country", it's read "she had a radiant, blooming Amazon in the country"
04:36.5 - missing the word "beastly" in "and felt beastly uncomfortable while I was doing it" - since this doesn't change the meaning, I'll leave it up to you if you want to correct it.
8:02 - You say resental for resentful. - again, that might be just pronunciation, so up to you on that one.
9:30 - the word "catch is pronounced "clatch" in "clasping and unclasping the catch"
16:44 - this didn't make sense, you read "It wasn't only the expression of her face" as "It wasn't the only expression of her face" - I don't think we can have two expressions on our face. :)

Great job, this was an exciting chapter!

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Post by jenniferrd » November 16th, 2018, 6:25 am

Chapter 7 - Spot PL - OK!

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Post by lethargilistic » November 27th, 2018, 12:39 pm

Just general FYI: I haven't had opportunity to record for the last bit because my living situation blew up.
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Post by Lynnet » November 27th, 2018, 1:18 pm

lethargilistic wrote:
November 27th, 2018, 12:39 pm
Just general FYI: I haven't had opportunity to record for the last bit because my living situation blew up.
Hope your situation settles down soon.
Just try and check in every couple of months and all will be well here.
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Post by lethargilistic » January 1st, 2019, 8:12 pm

jenniferrd wrote:
November 16th, 2018, 6:22 am
Chapter 9:
04:17 - missing the word "been" in "she'd been a radiant, blooming Amazon in the country", it's read "she had a radiant, blooming Amazon in the country"
04:36.5 - missing the word "beastly" in "and felt beastly uncomfortable while I was doing it" - since this doesn't change the meaning, I'll leave it up to you if you want to correct it.
8:02 - You say resental for resentful. - again, that might be just pronunciation, so up to you on that one.
9:30 - the word "catch is pronounced "clatch" in "clasping and unclasping the catch"
16:44 - this didn't make sense, you read "It wasn't only the expression of her face" as "It wasn't the only expression of her face" - I don't think we can have two expressions on our face. :)

Great job, this was an exciting chapter!
No longer homeless!

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04:17 - Added "been"
04:36.5 - I couldn't get the voice match even close with the correction, so I left "beastly" out.
8:02 - "Resentful" fixed
9:30 - "clatch" -> "catch"
16:44 - "It wasn't only the expression of her face" fixed.
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Post by jenniferrd » January 6th, 2019, 7:28 pm

Chapter 9 is Spot PL OK!

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