Hi Cari,CariJS wrote:Chapter 3 is up and ready: 10:16
I'd love to take Chapter 4, if I may? This is a fun read
Just one note:
3:19: 'old Christmas' should be 'old Merry Christmas'
But I do some observations about the story itself:
What a pointless addition...By this time Helen—which was her name ever since she was baptized—had crawled into bed again,
Methinks Mr. Jenks doesn't actually know what young girls like.First came the very thing she wanted most, then came what she wanted next, and then her third choice.