OPEN[PLAY]The Belle's Stratagem by Hannah Cowley - thw

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alatheron
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Post by alatheron » November 12th, 2020, 5:12 pm

May I take Doricourt?

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Post by EltonTheSnowman » November 15th, 2020, 8:18 am

Kitty wrote:
November 10th, 2020, 1:21 am
EltonTheSnowman wrote:
November 7th, 2020, 8:54 am
Lady Frances Touchwood ready for PL:
excellently played, Mattea, she sounds very naive and innocent but still forcefully getting her will if she really wants to. :thumbs: Now hearing you I am not sure I sound similar as Kitty when I have to "play" Lady Frances. How Courtall could fall for the trap is a mystery to me :lol:

Acts 2-4 are straight PL ok.

A few missed lines for Act 5 though:

> at about 1:31: missed line: "A-propos; now we shall be informed. Mr. Saville, I rejoice to see you, though Sir George will be disappointed: he's gone to your lodgings."

> at about 2:30: missed OMNES line: "Ha! ha! ha!"

> at about 3:01: missed OMNES line: "Joy! joy! joy!"

thanks !

Sonia
Here's the corrected version of act 5:

https://librivox.org/uploads/toddhw/bellesstratagem_ladyfrances_5_128kb.mp3
(3:37)

I apologise for the delay, my voice was completely destroyed after spending the entire week making seemingly endless phone calls at work. :(
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Post by Kitty » November 15th, 2020, 9:44 am

EltonTheSnowman wrote:
November 15th, 2020, 8:18 am
I apologise for the delay, my voice was completely destroyed after spending the entire week making seemingly endless phone calls at work. :(
ah yes, those people will never understand that we need our voice for much more important recordings here for LV :mrgreen:

thank you, Mattea, it's all PL ok now. Hope your voice is back to normal. It sounded good to me.

Sonia

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Post by ToddHW » November 15th, 2020, 4:12 pm

Sir George Touchwood awaits PL in the MW.

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Post by Kitty » November 16th, 2020, 4:58 am

ToddHW wrote:
November 15th, 2020, 4:12 pm
Sir George Touchwood awaits PL in the MW.
I hope Sir George was not getting impatient. Well acted out, Todd. Sir George does have a certain grandeur, which I first didn't think he had. He is not entirely like the bumbling elderly husband the young wife is cheating on (à la Molière). I like this character actually much more than the other cliché.

Acts 4 and 5 already PL ok :)

PL notes for Act 2:
> at 9:20: "I, for instance, should consider a man's complimenting my Wife as an impertinence" – you say "his wife", which would not be an impertinence

PL notes for Act 3:
> at 2:11: "Twould be a shocking indecorum to be seen together, you know." – I think you say "decorum" instead of "indecorum"

thanks

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Post by ToddHW » November 16th, 2020, 7:20 am

Well, why is it not a shocking indecorum for anyone to comment upon my lines? Complimenting my wife would be a sign of their good taste; complimenting their own would be but begging for approval of their good luck.

It was nice not to have to bumble along....

Ready for Spot PL.

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Post by Kitty » November 16th, 2020, 7:22 am

ToddHW wrote:
November 16th, 2020, 7:20 am
Well, why is it not a shocking indecorum for anyone to comment upon my lines? Complimenting my wife would be a sign of their good taste; complimenting their own would be but begging for approval of their good luck.
:lol: easyyyy....breathe deeply.

In fact you are not wrong with the comments, but I think Sir George sees it a bit differently here ;)

Sonia

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Post by Kitty » November 22nd, 2020, 12:50 pm

ToddHW wrote:
November 16th, 2020, 7:20 am
Ready for Spot PL.
:shock: I must have missed this. Sorry ! Both acts now PL ok. Thank you. Excellent patches.

Sonia


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Post by Kitty » November 23rd, 2020, 5:28 am

alatheron wrote:
November 22nd, 2020, 4:44 pm
Doricourt ready for PL:
wow, Andrew, thank you so much, this was a wonderful performance :clap: I especially loved the moments of faked madness you presented so convincingly. But for the rest, you convey the complexity of his character quite well, and the tender lover-moments are just as enjoyable as the more hard-hearted attitudes he presents. :thumbs:

I'll mark Acts 1, 4 and 5 already PL ok.

I have a few small adjustements to suggest for acts 2 and 3. It's mostly cutting or inserting silences, so not that difficult to edit.

for Act 2:

> for the voice credit we usually use the standard "...read by...", not "played by". Maybe you could change it in this act, so we all sound consistent

> at 1:29: between "so here I sit" (throws himself on a sopha.) and "There's my hat, and here are my legs." – please leave also 2-3 seconds of silence here, to make it easier for our editor to insert the stage directions inside your speech

> at 2:04: between "no excuse in the world" (leaping from the sopha). and "Lead the way, John" – also here, please leave a bit more silence

for Act 3:

> at 0:07: between "So!" [Looking at a Picture.] and "this is my mistress" - also here: more silence

> from 0:21-0:25: between "La Bella Magdalena". and "Give me a woman in whose touching mien" – you can cut the long silence as it's all in the same speech

> at 0:42: between "Madam!"—[Aside.] and "Finely caught!" - more space

> from 1:27-1:29: between "here must be some envy in this!" and "I see she is a coquette." – silence can be cut shorter

> from 1:34-1:37: between "the truth of your character? ha, ha, ha!" and "Miss Hardy" – silence can be cut and you also you missed the second laughs (I enjoyed the first laughs, so wouldn't mind hearing some more here :mrgreen: )

Thank you. :) great job ! Hopefully we'll hear you in many more plays to come.

Sonia

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Post by alatheron » November 23rd, 2020, 9:58 am

Kitty wrote:
November 23rd, 2020, 5:28 am
alatheron wrote:
November 22nd, 2020, 4:44 pm
Doricourt ready for PL:
I have a few small adjustements to suggest for acts 2 and 3...
Thank you for listening! Have made your amendments and just to make things simpler have replaced the voice credit for all sections:

https://librivox.org/uploads/toddhw/bellesstratagem_doricourt_1_128kb.mp3 (4:53) *
https://librivox.org/uploads/toddhw/bellesstratagem_doricourt_2_128kb.mp3 (2:15)
https://librivox.org/uploads/toddhw/bellesstratagem_doricourt_3_128kb.mp3 (3:43)
https://librivox.org/uploads/toddhw/bellesstratagem_doricourt_4_128kb.mp3 (5:52) *
https://librivox.org/uploads/toddhw/bellesstratagem_doricourt_5_128kb.mp3 (8:54) *

* Voice credits amended only

Thanks, Andrew


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Post by silverquill » November 23rd, 2020, 11:13 am

Finishing edits on a couple of pieces, so looking at this one.

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