hi Stella, so as promised, I took some time to review your file right away, that way you can work on the other acts whenever you have time.
first of all: wonderfully narrated, I like the quiet tone of your voice. It's an excellent counterpart to the rather hectic action that is taking place here, so I think this will be very fitting as backbone of the play.
Also you forgot no lines at all
your eyes are good at catching the important bits
I have a few small notes to correct though, but nothing difficult. Please do not re-record it all
, it's too much work (for you and me) and it's not necessary. Editing a file is really easy, I'll walk you through it.
The easiest way to correct a sentence is: open a new Audacity window / record the sentence / noise clean and amplify if needed / cut and paste into the correct slot in the masterfile. Or in your case, copying and pasting from a part where you already said the name will do the trick as well
> at 1:10
, aside" - here is a case where the old scripts write the "aside" AFTER the speech that should be said as aside. The narrator has to be quite vigilant for such annoying quirks in the script. If you read the lines that Foresight speaks, you'll see the first two sentences should be the aside. Since it will be at the beginning of his speech then, you need to include the charactername
. Sorry I didn't warn you about this. Sometimes the asides are at the correct spot at the beginning, but sometimes they are not. It's a bit tricky.
> at 1:25 and 1:40
" - could you please pronounce the same name consistently throughout the play. You once said Valenteen
and once Valentyne
> at 1:55
: "Mrs Foresight
, aside" - same here, name needs to be included
as the aside will be put at the beginning of the speech
> and finally: your volume
is only 65.7 dB
, I really had to crank it up to be able to hear you. Could you please amplify the entire file with 21 dB, to get into the desired range of 86-92 dB. To amplify, do the following (you have Audacity, I suppose ?)
> highlight your recording
> go to Effect
> go to Amplify
> input 21 in the upper slot (called: amplification dB) - change nothing in the lower box !
> press ok
That's it. Please reupload with the exact same file name
You did really well. My notes seem long, but basically it was only 2 omissions and one pronunciation. It was really good and I hope you liked the process and I am looking forward to your next acts. Best keep act 1 till last though, start with the shorter ones.