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Post by ToddHW » October 29th, 2020, 11:09 am

Given you a one month extension.

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Post by alanmapstone » October 31st, 2020, 3:36 am

Lanham act 2 revised

https://librivox.org/uploads/toddhw/civilianclothes_mrlanham_2.mp3

I like the line where he tells Florence not to bully her mother. He knows them both so well :lol:
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Post by Kitty » October 31st, 2020, 6:37 am

alanmapstone wrote:
October 31st, 2020, 3:36 am
Lanham act 2 revised

https://librivox.org/uploads/toddhw/civilianclothes_mrlanham_2.mp3

I like the line where he tells Florence not to bully her mother. He knows them both so well :lol:
haha yes, maybe he is under their thumb a bit as well ;)

Everything well inserted. I like the conversational tone you do in the group discussion :thumbs:

Thanks, all of Lanham now PL ok.

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Post by OooThatsNifty » November 25th, 2020, 11:23 pm

Hello! Sorry for the delay, and thanks again for the extension - here's Billy Arkwright:

Act 1:
https://librivox.org/uploads/toddhw/civilianclothes_billyarkwright_1_128kb.mp3
Time: 17:44

Act 2:
https://librivox.org/uploads/toddhw/civilianclothes_billyarkwright_2_128kb.mp3
Time: 7:40

Act 3:
https://librivox.org/uploads/toddhw/civilianclothes_billyarkwright_3_128kb.mp3
Time: 2:21


Wasn't sure if you wanted AEF abbreviated or read in full for the character intro, so I gave you both. Let me know if anything needs an edit, or if you have any CC / redirects / etc. Thanks!
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Post by Kitty » Yesterday, 6:15 am

OooThatsNifty wrote:
November 25th, 2020, 11:23 pm
Hello! Sorry for the delay, and thanks again for the extension - here's Billy Arkwright:
thank you Andrew, you really got right into character with poor Billy. I pity the boy, he didn't get a chance throughout the play. :lol: I love the portrayal you made here, trying to overplay his insecurities with roughness at one point in act 2 (which completely failed :mrgreen: ). And slightly tipsy too, well conveyed. :thumbs: I enjoyed the whole performance, this will sound great once assembled.

Act 3 is straight PL ok.

I have a few notes for the other two acts though:

for Act 1:

> at 17:35: (p. 36) repeat "yes sir, good afternoon" – is there one version you prefer, then you can cut out the other, unless you prefer Todd to choose ? Usually we only keep one version, the one that the reader prefers.

for Act 2:

> at 2:00: (p. 70) repeat "No" – also here, one version you prefer ?

> at about 2:40: (p. 71) missed line: "Oh !"

> at 3:25: (p. 74) repeat "Yes, yes"

> at about 4:20: (p. 76) missed line: "Thought you'd never get here !"

thank you

Sonia

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Post by OooThatsNifty » Yesterday, 4:00 pm

Kitty wrote:
Yesterday, 6:15 am
thank you Andrew, you really got right into character with poor Billy. I pity the boy, he didn't get a chance throughout the play. :lol: I love the portrayal you made here, trying to overplay his insecurities with roughness at one point in act 2 (which completely failed :mrgreen: ). And slightly tipsy too, well conveyed. :thumbs: I enjoyed the whole performance, this will sound great once assembled.

Act 3 is straight PL ok.

I have a few notes for the other two acts though:

for Act 1:
> at 17:35: (p. 36) repeat "yes sir, good afternoon" – is there one version you prefer, then you can cut out the other, unless you prefer Todd to choose ? Usually we only keep one version, the one that the reader prefers.

for Act 2:
> at 2:00: (p. 70) repeat "No" – also here, one version you prefer ?
> at about 2:40: (p. 71) missed line: "Oh !"
> at 3:25: (p. 74) repeat "Yes, yes"
> at about 4:20: (p. 76) missed line: "Thought you'd never get here !"
thank you
Sonia
Thanks very much!

The repeats were just oversights while editing - I've cut the extras, and spliced in the missing lines:

https://librivox.org/uploads/toddhw/civilianclothes_billyarkwright_1_128kb.mp3
New Time: 17:41

https://librivox.org/uploads/toddhw/civilianclothes_billyarkwright_2_128kb.mp3
New Time: 7:39

Thanks again!
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Post by Kitty » 46 minutes ago

OooThatsNifty wrote:
Yesterday, 4:00 pm
The repeats were just oversights while editing - I've cut the extras, and spliced in the missing lines:

https://librivox.org/uploads/toddhw/civilianclothes_billyarkwright_1_128kb.mp3
New Time: 17:41

https://librivox.org/uploads/toddhw/civilianclothes_billyarkwright_2_128kb.mp3
New Time: 7:39
perfect now and PL ok, thank you :) That's another big role in the box

Sonia

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