FULL[PLAY]One Act Play Collection 014 - thw

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Post by mightyfelix » February 12th, 2021, 6:59 pm

Individual files for Geraldine can be marked PL ok.

Here is the completed file, coming in at 28:51.
https://librivox.org/uploads/toddhw/oneactplays014_10_various_128kb.mp3

TJ has agreed to PL. :D

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Post by ToddHW » February 12th, 2021, 7:05 pm

mightyfelix wrote:
February 11th, 2021, 8:48 pm
Gertrude Silberthwaite is PL ok. And if anyone wants to join the Zoom meeting tomorrow at 4:30 pm Central, you can watch me stitch it together!
Very nicely done.

Thank you, Todd

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Post by benderca » February 13th, 2021, 8:41 am

mightyfelix wrote:
February 12th, 2021, 6:59 pm
Individual files for Geraldine can be marked PL ok.

Here is the completed file, coming in at 28:51.
https://librivox.org/uploads/toddhw/oneactplays014_10_various_128kb.mp3

TJ has agreed to PL. :D
I'll get right to this. Do you happen to have a pdf version of this play? I just downloaded the pages I was in (and I can't download the whole file from Hathitrust).

Thanks,
TJ

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Post by benderca » February 13th, 2021, 9:32 am

mightyfelix wrote:
February 12th, 2021, 6:59 pm
Individual files for Geraldine can be marked PL ok.

Here is the completed file, coming in at 28:51.
https://librivox.org/uploads/toddhw/oneactplays014_10_various_128kb.mp3

TJ has agreed to PL. :D
Wow! This play is fantastic! Great acting, great editing... Great writing! I love it! :clap:

A few comments and suggestions (none of them pressing or necessary):

2:22 Lady Geraldine says "Chelten College" instead of "Cheltenham College" written in the script.

2:27 I would suggest taking out the stage directions "Dr. Alice (nodding)", just because it interrupts the flow of the the dialogue, and you clearly say "yes" (with a little laugh), so we can imagine the nodding (imho).

2:56 I would suggest taking out the stage directions "Dr. Alice (reproachfully)" for the same reason as above, and reproach can clearly be heard in your voice.

4:56 I would suggest removing the stage directions "Dr. Alice (laughing)"; you have a little laugh in your voice already.

12:18 Stage Directions read "Lady Geraldine fervently" -- I hear no "v", it sounds like "fer-ently".

Nicely done, everyone!

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Post by mightyfelix » February 16th, 2021, 12:18 pm

Thanks, TJ. I took some of these suggestions, though not all of them. :)
benderca wrote:
February 13th, 2021, 9:32 am
2:22 Lady Geraldine says "Chelten College" instead of "Cheltenham College" written in the script. (Not worried about this one. I think it's more of a dialect thing, in that the final syllables are extremely shortened: "Chelt'n'm.")

2:27 I would suggest taking out the stage directions "Dr. Alice (nodding)", just because it interrupts the flow of the the dialogue, and you clearly say "yes" (with a little laugh), so we can imagine the nodding (imho). (I'm going to leave this one in, too, as it's visual, and while some might imagine a nod if it wasn't stated, many might not.)

2:56 I would suggest taking out the stage directions "Dr. Alice (reproachfully)" for the same reason as above, and reproach can clearly be heard in your voice. (I agree. For some reason, I didn't notice this one the first time through. I've removed it.)

4:56 I would suggest removing the stage directions "Dr. Alice (laughing)"; you have a little laugh in your voice already. (Another good suggestion, and one I hadn't noticed. It's gone. Now at 4:53.)

12:18 Stage Directions read "Lady Geraldine fervently" -- I hear no "v", it sounds like "fer-ently". (I see what you mean. The 'v' is quite soft, but I think it's still there. And would be understood by most native English speakers, so I won't ask Todd to re-do it.)

Nicely done, everyone!
https://librivox.org/uploads/toddhw/oneactplays014_10_various_128kb.mp3
Now 28:46.

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Post by ToddHW » February 16th, 2021, 2:17 pm

Thank you. Ready for Spot PL.

Todd

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Post by benderca » February 16th, 2021, 4:37 pm

mightyfelix wrote:
February 16th, 2021, 12:18 pm
Thanks, TJ. I took some of these suggestions, though not all of them. :)

https://librivox.org/uploads/toddhw/oneactplays014_10_various_128kb.mp3
Now 28:46.
Perfect! Beautifully edited, Devorah! Spot PL OK!

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Post by ToddHW » February 16th, 2021, 5:17 pm

Thank you. Only one play left to complete!

Todd

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