OPEN[PLAY]The Torch-Bearers by George Kelly - thw

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Post by mightyfelix » May 24th, 2020, 10:46 am

Twiller PL ok!

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Post by ToddHW » May 25th, 2020, 6:56 pm

Act 3 is ready for Final PL. What a riot. Act 3 by itself could be a good play. And you all sound great!

I am looking forward to getting to the other acts as the final parts come in.

Thanks, Todd

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Post by mightyfelix » May 25th, 2020, 8:45 pm

Ah, well, I won't have a spare hour-and-some-change until Wednesday. But I'm certainly looking forward to listening when I do! :D

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Post by larryhayes7 » May 26th, 2020, 11:51 am

I have Act I for Huxley almost ready just have to clean up the sound, all the edits are in. Getting close!

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Post by larryhayes7 » May 27th, 2020, 7:32 am

Mr Huxley Act 1 completed ready for PL

https://librivox.org/uploads/toddhw/torchbearers_Hossefrosse_1_128kb.mp3

Time 7:04


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Post by ToddHW » May 27th, 2020, 12:57 pm

I am in the middle of assembling Act 2 and I am laughing out loud as I edit. Almost tears. Very funny....

Thanks, Todd

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Post by benderca » May 27th, 2020, 1:56 pm

ToddHW wrote:
May 27th, 2020, 12:57 pm
I am in the middle of assembling Act 2 and I am laughing out loud as I edit. Almost tears. Very funny....

Thanks, Todd
I can't wait to hear it! :lol:

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Post by jennlea » May 27th, 2020, 2:20 pm

benderca wrote:
May 27th, 2020, 1:56 pm
ToddHW wrote:
May 27th, 2020, 12:57 pm
I am in the middle of assembling Act 2 and I am laughing out loud as I edit. Almost tears. Very funny....

Thanks, Todd
I can't wait to hear it! :lol:
Me either!
-Jenn B.

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Post by mightyfelix » May 27th, 2020, 4:24 pm

Oh, I so enjoyed hearing Huxley's part! You'll sound wonderful with the rest of our voices! There are a few things to correct. The easiest way is to start at the end and work your way backwards so that the time stamps don't change. :)

0:10 Part of line missing (underlined) "Mrs. Ritter—good evening."
0:35 This line belongs to Mrs. Fell and should be cut: "It's true."
2:15 Part of line missing (underlined) "Naturally!—You wanted a scene!"
6:49 Missing line: "We’d better lay him right here." (It should go after "Lift up his head.")

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Post by larryhayes7 » May 27th, 2020, 4:38 pm

Wow thank you I thought I got all of them, I did a find on Hossefrosse and then copied and pasted to a document to read. Thank you for catching I was just starting to record Act II

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Post by larryhayes7 » May 27th, 2020, 5:19 pm

Corrections made
Mr. Huxley Act I
https://librivox.org/uploads/toddhw/torchbearers_hossefrosse_1_128kb.mp3
Time 7:04

2 of the lines I did not bold that was why they were left out :roll:


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Post by mightyfelix » May 27th, 2020, 7:06 pm

Act 3 sounds excellent! Except, I must say, I'm rather embarassed to hear so much background noise behind my lines! I couldn't hear it when I submitted them, but now it sounds so loud to me! :oops: Ah well, I'm in the process of setting up a new recording space, and hopefully I won't have those issues any more. But enough about me! :roll:

I noticed that you cut many of the stage directions, which I think was entirely right. (And partly because that would have made the act at least ten minutes longer!) There aren't too many places in this act where you need to stack voices, and I think you did a great job with them. I have a couple of suggestions, the first one being in my opinion the only important one.

7:05 Here's a stage direction I think is important to keep in: "[He goes through the arched doorway at the head of the stairs.]" This is his exiting the scene just before Mrs. Pampinelli comes in. I think listeners need to know that he is gone.
41:30 I felt we could comfortably cut this direction, if you're looking to trim down a bit more. It felt to me like it broke the flow of the scene more than most. "Mrs. Pampinelli. [Imperiously, and moving over to a point above the table at which Mrs. Ritter is sitting]" Up to you, though.
54:22 This one could also be comfortably cut, I think. "Mrs. Pampinelli. [To Mrs. Ritter]"

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Post by mightyfelix » May 27th, 2020, 7:13 pm

larryhayes7 wrote:
May 27th, 2020, 5:19 pm
Corrections made
Mr. Huxley Act I
https://librivox.org/uploads/toddhw/torchbearers_hossefrosse_1_128kb.mp3
Time 7:04

2 of the lines I did not bold that was why they were left out :roll:
PL ok, thank you! There are a couple of things to watch out for on the next one that I forgot to mention:

Your volume is a bit high. Todd will adjust it anyway for this piece, but that's definitely something you need to be careful of if you're submitting to a non-dramatic project.

Also, specfic to dramatic projects, you might want to be more careful of your spacing. Mostly you left a nice comfortable pause of four or five seconds, but there were some spots where there's barely one second! When I edit my dramatic parts, I like to copy a chunk of silence the length that I want it, then paste it in in between lines. That way, I don't need to worry about it as I'm recording. :wink:

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