OPEN[PLAY]The Torch-Bearers by George Kelly - thw

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Post by ToddHW » May 8th, 2020, 1:54 pm

You need to post this in the Listener's Wanted forum - as an mp3 - to get it assessed.

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Post by reecedawg » May 9th, 2020, 10:23 pm

"After the dazzle of day is gone,
Only the dark, dark night shows to my eyes the stars;
After the clangor of organ majestic, or chorus, or perfect band,
Silent, athwart my soul, moves the symphony true."
Walt Whitman

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Post by ToddHW » May 10th, 2020, 6:23 am

Thank you.

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Post by DrewStarmer » May 13th, 2020, 7:45 pm

Working on it still! Some tech difficulties


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Post by ToddHW » May 14th, 2020, 7:57 am

Thank you.

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Post by mightyfelix » May 16th, 2020, 10:32 am

Just got finished listening to Mr. Twiller. Very well done! I like the down-to-earth tone he has. I think our "light and shade" and "gestures" dialogue will come off very well. There is only one missing line, in act 1. I have a few notes on spacing for act 2, but I think Todd will be able to work with it no problem, so I'll go ahead and mark it PL ok. You might want to take a look, though, for something to keep in mind next time. :)

Act 1:

0:41 Missing line (It was hidden inside stage directions): "Hello, Teddy!"

Act 2:

0:17 Need more space for stage directions in between "Yes?" and "Excuse me, Nelly."
1:14 Need more space for stage directions between "No!" and "What are you trying to do?"
2:07 Need more space for stage directions between "damned annoying" and "even if you don't."

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Post by mightyfelix » May 16th, 2020, 8:21 pm

Nelly Fell, Act 3 is PL ok!

There is a longish silence at 0:09 that's not necessary and that should be cut, but nothing you can't manage. (after "close that door, if you will.")

So that means that Act 3 is ready for the final edit! :clap:

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Post by ToddHW » May 18th, 2020, 5:11 am

Completed assembly of Act 3; now have to stack some lines and adjust volumes and gaps throughout..... And, finally get chance to hear it all too!

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Post by reecedawg » May 18th, 2020, 11:01 pm

mightyfelix wrote:
May 16th, 2020, 10:32 am
Just got finished listening to Mr. Twiller. Very well done! I like the down-to-earth tone he has. I think our "light and shade" and "gestures" dialogue will come off very well. There is only one missing line, in act 1. I have a few notes on spacing for act 2, but I think Todd will be able to work with it no problem, so I'll go ahead and mark it PL ok. You might want to take a look, though, for something to keep in mind next time. :)

Act 1:

0:41 Missing line (It was hidden inside stage directions): "Hello, Teddy!"

Act 2:

0:17 Need more space for stage directions in between "Yes?" and "Excuse me, Nelly."
1:14 Need more space for stage directions between "No!" and "What are you trying to do?"
2:07 Need more space for stage directions between "damned annoying" and "even if you don't."
Here's act 1 with the missing line inserted... now 2:02 total.
https://librivox.org/uploads/toddhw/torchbearers_twiller_01_128kb.mp3

Thank you for the heads-up on line spacing. I will keep that in mind to ease the editing process as much as I can.
"After the dazzle of day is gone,
Only the dark, dark night shows to my eyes the stars;
After the clangor of organ majestic, or chorus, or perfect band,
Silent, athwart my soul, moves the symphony true."
Walt Whitman

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Post by ToddHW » May 19th, 2020, 5:55 am

Thank you.

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Post by larryhayes7 » May 22nd, 2020, 5:56 pm

Question I am putting my script together to start reading and I came across this and not sure on this.

Mrs. Fell. He’s the leading man. [Hossefrosse raises his right hand toward Nelly and laughs deprecatingly.] Unfortunately, there isn’t a place in the play where he can use that perfectly gorgeous singing-voice of his. [Hossefrosse is quite overcome, and crosses, with hand extended, to Spindler.] It’s true.

Where it says: Hossefrosse raises his right hand toward Nelly and laughs deprecatingly

Even though I do not have a line there am I to laugh and then that is just inserted?

A little confusing to me

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Post by mightyfelix » May 22nd, 2020, 9:11 pm

larryhayes7 wrote:
May 22nd, 2020, 5:56 pm
Where it says: Hossefrosse raises his right hand toward Nelly and laughs deprecatingly

Even though I do not have a line there am I to laugh and then that is just inserted?

A little confusing to me
You can if you like. It's not required. I consider those little moments kind of "bonus" lines. It can never hurt to record it, when something like that is specified in the stage directions, even if we don't end up using it. Sometimes there's no good place to stick it in, but there are other times when it really adds a lot of charm!

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Post by DrewStarmer » May 23rd, 2020, 8:10 pm

Hey Todd, so I've finally got completed my proof listen with adrianstephens. Am I ready to begin recording for Teddy?

Drew

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Post by ToddHW » May 24th, 2020, 5:19 am

Okay. Thank you. Welcome. Any questions, post in here.

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