Your three changes are all made. Good thoughts and thank you for them. New file uploaded.mightyfelix wrote: ↑May 27th, 2020, 7:06 pm Act 3 sounds excellent! Except, I must say, I'm rather embarassed to hear so much background noise behind my lines! I couldn't hear it when I submitted them, but now it sounds so loud to me!Ah well, I'm in the process of setting up a new recording space, and hopefully I won't have those issues any more. But enough about me!
I noticed that you cut many of the stage directions, which I think was entirely right. (And partly because that would have made the act at least ten minutes longer!) There aren't too many places in this act where you need to stack voices, and I think you did a great job with them. I have a couple of suggestions, the first one being in my opinion the only important one.
7:05 Here's a stage direction I think is important to keep in: "[He goes through the arched doorway at the head of the stairs.]" This is his exiting the scene just before Mrs. Pampinelli comes in. I think listeners need to know that he is gone.
41:30 I felt we could comfortably cut this direction, if you're looking to trim down a bit more. It felt to me like it broke the flow of the scene more than most. "Mrs. Pampinelli. [Imperiously, and moving over to a point above the table at which Mrs. Ritter is sitting]" Up to you, though.
54:22 This one could also be comfortably cut, I think. "Mrs. Pampinelli. [To Mrs. Ritter]"
I had only cut stage directions that I thought were not helpful to picturing what overall was going on. That someone just moved left or right didn't really matter in all the confusion, and so I might cut that. But if they moved closer to someone else, perhaps to be close together face to face for some of the exchanges, or if they moved to do something like pick up stuff from the piano, that stayed in. So I should have kept Ritter passing through the doorway, and the other two places you suggested I cut could easily go.
Act 2 will be probably twice as long; definitely two files....
By the way, I don't hear the noise you refer to in your part. Either it is outside my aged hearing range, or your speakers/headphones are better than mine - or you are being too hard on yourself!
Thanks, Todd
I guess adding in the missing line at the beginning of the act put the rest just a bit off kilter. Not to worry! The easiest way to fix it will be to cut the "I'm sorry" currently at 4:11 and paste it back in after the second "click-click," which is currently at 4:22. My apologies, I guess it would have been easier if I'd told you which lines were before and after.
Of course, it's easier on Todd if they're in the correct order.
