Plays and other dramatic works
Anodyne is a great word. Love it. I'll take care of that and get it back to you,adrianstephens wrote: ↑July 8th, 2020, 1:22 amHello Jennifer,JtotheP716 wrote: ↑July 7th, 2020, 4:40 pmhttps://librivox.org/uploads/toddhw/damon_widow_gelessing.mp3 07:55
Love the acting you put into this somewhat anodyne piece.
One correction: @ 0:18 missing line "What are they?"
Thannk you, Jim. PL doubly OK :0).neecheelok70 wrote: ↑July 9th, 2020, 11:10 amHere is the fixed Damon:
Sorry. I meant to send in the corrected Silenus. Here you are:
Thank you. PL OK.JtotheP716 wrote: ↑July 12th, 2020, 2:26 pmhttps://librivox.org/uploads/toddhw/damon_widow_gelessing.mp3 07:57
Hello Lisette,adrianstephens wrote: ↑May 8th, 2020, 10:58 pmHello Michelle,wib66 wrote: ↑May 8th, 2020, 9:20 amHere is the file for Lisette section 59 thanks
Thank you for your reading. Very clear, and very scheming!
One note for future dramatic readings, where there is a stage directioin such as "(aside)" please leave a 2s pause. This visually marks the location so that the editor can edit in the narration of this stage direction. There were a couple of places in this part where you did not do that. It doesn't matter for this part, as I'm the editor.
Would you please revise and re-upload adding ", maid to the widow" in your voice credit?
My apologies for not spotting this the first time around.
Todd, I took out a few more of the stage directions and I think it flows better now. (I left many in for the dramatic pauses, however). I have the original version saved as well, if you think I should revert to the original version.benderca wrote: ↑June 11th, 2020, 1:15 amThanks, Todd! I think I'll give it another listen, because I was leaning towards taking a few more stage directions out. But I agree with you that the pauses are sometimes effective as well. Especially the "raises her eyebrows" pauses...ToddHW wrote: ↑June 10th, 2020, 1:42 pmPL OK. I think you could have taken out more of the voice tone stage directions if you wished, but I have no problem with leaving them in. It is intended to be a very awkward situation, and I can easily picture people saying nothing but speechlessly giving potent glares at each other before they do speak.benderca wrote: ↑June 8th, 2020, 6:47 amI took out a couple of the stage directions, when voice tone made them clear and when if left in they would have interrupted the flow, but I left most in. I was considering taking out several more, but I'd like a second opinion. When PLing, please feel free to comment also on the spacing and volume.
Other spacing fine and volume also fine.
I took out the following stage directions (time stamps are for the current version) -- I have the time stamps from the original version as well, if you'd like to compare.
4:42 Enid (a bit impatiently)
5:01 Enid (stoutly)
5:38 Mrs. Packard (pouncingly)
6:28 Enid (worried)
10:15 Diana (furiously)
10:36 Mrs. Packard (angrily)
10:46 Mrs. Packard (furiously)