first of all, your reading is very forceful, quite in line with the main characters herektaylor07 wrote: ↑February 9th, 2020, 7:55 pmhere are stage directions for "The Woman Tamer"
So far, I only listened to the first 5 minutes of your stage directions, but broke off at that point, as the PL notes would take me way too long to write down.
You may not have seen Todd's answer to your question, here: viewtopic.php?p=1677021#p1677021
because you left out many crucial voice-qualifying directions. Yes, many will get cut, but we prefer the narrator to read them all, so the editor has the choice. Sometimes the actor doesn't convey it accurately so the directions will stay in.
Here are my initial PL notes, to give you an idea how and what needs to be included. I stopped after 5 minutes reading and about 20 minutes of note scribbling, because I realized I had to write down most of the missing directions, and it would take me over an hour to complete this. It's better that you go over your file once more and add all the missing bits and then I'll do a final PL for the finished file.
> at 1:23: "Bongo read by" – can actually get cut out, as Bongo doesn't have a speaking role
> at 1:48: (p. 15) "Front room of Katie's cottage" – you say "front" which is a different setting
> at about 2:41: (p. 15) missed line: "Katie, rising"
> at about 3:29: (p. 16-17) five missed lines: "Katie, pleasantly", "Katie, shrilly", "Katie, scornfully", "Chopsey, stung", "Chopsey, asserting himself"
> at about 3:40: (p. 17) missed line: "Chopsey, overwrought"
> at about 4:40: (p. 17-18) three missed lines: "Katie, in a hard voice", "Chopsey, hesitatingly", "Katie, provokingly"
> at 4:58: (p. 18) "grabs hold of her" – you can cut out "Chopsey" here, as it's after his speech. We only include the name if it's at the beginning of the speech
> at 5:06: (p. 18) "gives her a half-hearted shove" – same here, "Chopsey can get cut"