Fantastic performance! Your voice is perfect for Diana! You really bring her to life perfectly! Thanks.
First of all the bit rate of your recording is 80 kbps and it should be 128 kbps. Maybe one of our tech-savvy friends here can explain to you how you can change your settings. I can give you an explanation and a link:
"Audio Format: LibriVox uses a specific audio format for its files: mono sound, 44.1 Khz 16-bit audio, encoded in the MP3 format at a constant 128 kbps bit rate. Although there are a lot of technical terms there, you don't need to understand them to create valid files. All you need to know is how to tell your audio editing software to use these settings. See the Wiki article below for step-by-step help."
More Information: LibriVox Wiki: https://wiki.librivox.org/index.php/Tech_Specs
As far as the text is concerned, I have a few notes:
00:35 You omitted “over”: "I'd have gone over
but you added an "over" at 00:45: "Oh, I'd love the romance of being (over) there..."
so I think it equals out (and I think it's quite clear which "there" you mean), so you can leave it as is, if you like.
03:01 Missing line:
DIANA: I do.
04:22 “It’d be most embarrassing for me”… should be “it’s most embarrassing for me”
(I think this changes the meaning a bit. What do you think?)
4:29 You say: “But what if they say is really -- true?
It should be: “But if what they say is really--true-- "
(I think this changes the meaning slightly as well).
04:37 You say:
“I thought I did--but after what she said
I began to wonder--"
It should be:
“I thought I did--but after she said it
I began to wonder--"
(I'm not sure if this changes the meaning or not - could probably stay as is).
"Mrs. Packard! Why just a few moments ago in this very room you—"
Here you left out the word “you” at then end, but I think that will be fine when I cut you off.
In the end, the changes are so small, they probably don't make a difference. I'll let you decide which ones you'd like to make. In any case, you'll need to add the missing line and change the bit rate.
One more thing -- it's not necessary for this recording, but in the future please leave 2-3 seconds between your lines for the editor.