OPEN[PLAY]The Lying Lover by Steele - thw

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Post by Foon » February 4th, 2019, 7:06 am

Foon - Please correct my pronunciation!

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Post by Kitty » February 4th, 2019, 10:32 am

Foon wrote:
February 4th, 2019, 7:06 am
Here's the rest of the stage directions:
thanks, Foon, that was fast :9: Todd is always happy when he has the stage directions quite early on.

two small notes for Act 4:

> at 2:26: Lettice, aside - I think the aside is all of it, so we need the name

> at about 2:50: missing: Exit

Question for Todd for Act 5:

> at about 3:40: "Song by Mr Leveridge" - do you want to "announce" the song ? then Foon needs to include that line as well, otherwise it's PL ok.

Sonia

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Post by ToddHW » February 4th, 2019, 10:34 am

Kitty wrote:
February 4th, 2019, 10:32 am
Foon wrote:
February 4th, 2019, 7:06 am
Here's the rest of the stage directions:
thanks, Foon, that was fast :9: Todd is always happy when he has the stage directions quite early on.

Question for Todd for Act 5:

> at about 3:40: "Song by Mr Leveridge" - do you want to "announce" the song ? then Foon needs to include that line as well, otherwise it's PL ok.

Sonia
Absolutely delighted to have the stage directions!

Don't need the song announced, so it is PL OK.

Thanks, Todd

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Post by Kitty » February 4th, 2019, 10:36 am

ToddHW wrote:
February 4th, 2019, 10:34 am
Don't need the song announced, so it is PL OK.
that was a fast reply !

thanks, PL ok then

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Post by Foon » February 6th, 2019, 6:23 am

Kitty wrote:
February 4th, 2019, 10:32 am
Foon wrote:
February 4th, 2019, 7:06 am
Here's the rest of the stage directions:
thanks, Foon, that was fast :9: Todd is always happy when he has the stage directions quite early on.

two small notes for Act 4:

> at 2:26: Lettice, aside - I think the aside is all of it, so we need the name

> at about 2:50: missing: Exit
And here's another one for spot PL!
https://librivox.org/uploads/toddhw/lyinglover_narrator_4_128kb.mp3 5:18
Foon - Please correct my pronunciation!

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Post by Kitty » February 6th, 2019, 6:55 am

Foon wrote:
February 6th, 2019, 6:23 am
And here's another one for spot PL!
https://librivox.org/uploads/toddhw/lyinglover_narrator_4_128kb.mp3 5:18
I'm following you around like a puppy here :lol:

PL ok again, thanks

Sonia

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Post by pmstrahm » February 14th, 2019, 7:20 pm

pistol pete, CC

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Post by Kitty » February 15th, 2019, 12:55 am

pmstrahm wrote:
February 14th, 2019, 7:20 pm
here is the Goaler
https://librivox.org/uploads/toddhw/lyinglover_goaler_5_128kb.mp3
thanks Pete ! well it's actually gaoler, not goaler (nothing to do with football) ;) but at least you recorded it correctly, so the file name is not important.

how sad he only had one line, but you made the most of it. 8-) All correct and PL ok.

Sonia

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Post by alanmapstone » February 16th, 2019, 10:20 pm

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Post by Kitty » Yesterday, 6:51 am

alanmapstone wrote:
February 16th, 2019, 10:20 pm
Simon act 2
https://librivox.org/uploads/toddhw/lyinglover_simon_2.mp3
Simon totally PL ok. You are excelling in the trusty man-servant roles, Alan :thumbs: thank you

Sonia



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Post by Kitty » Today, 11:24 am

thank you, Ken :) you play the "best buddy" to perfection, and the whole intriguing is very well acted out. I especially love the laughing undertone in some parts and the very tearful performances in two places. :thumbs:

Act 2 is already PL ok, but I have a few notes for the other three acts:

Act 1:

> after 0:40: you don't really need to say "end of act 1" and from then on it's all a repetition of the previous lines. Was there one version you prefered ? If so you could cut out the others, unless you want Todd to choose. In that case all would be ok

Act 4:

> at 0:10: "That compliment won't pass upon me" - you say "complaint" but it wasn't a complaint at all that Lovemore made

> at 0:59: "you can't so much as see her chamber window, you must needs walk hither" - I hear "widow" but I may be mistaken there, :hmm: but you definitely said "talk" instead of "walk"

> at 3:13: "He told Lovemore this morning such a relation of his feasting ladies" - you say "relationship" which is a misunderstanding here. "relation" only means "narrative, tale" here in this context, not a "family member"

Act 5:

> at 4:10: "Don't you know, pride, scorn, affectation" - you say "affection" which is too positive a quality and would not fit here in this enumeration

> at 5:08: "now you may press his livid lips" - I think I hear "vivid" lips, which is exactly the contrary ;)

thanks

Sonia

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