ToddHW wrote: ↑
January 27th, 2019, 4:28 pm
Stage directions ready for PL, in the MW.
woah, this first act was lengthy. Almost Pinero material. Speaking of which, I was fully expecting you to read "by Arthur Wing Pinero" each time you said the author credit
"Adams" startled me at each occasion.
excellent job, Todd. The narrator has quite some funny lines here as well, so listening to it all was a pleasure.
already PL ok
Some small notes for Acts 1 and 2
, probably optional though:
for Act 1
> at 0:27
: “Herbert Dix” – you say “Rob
ert” but no need to change, I'm sure the correct voice credit will come in, so it won't be needed. Luckily you said the name correctly for the rest of the play. No repetition of the Glynda disaster
> at 0:44
: “Ernest Bristed....” I think he can be cut out
, since he didn’t have a speaking role
> at 17:23
: (p. 109): “the inevitable chamois, powder
, lipsalve, etc” – you forgot the powder but I think this is highly optional. Anyway, you disclosed already enough about a woman’s private life in there
just mentioning it because I noticed it
for Act 2
> at 0:20
: in Acts 1 and 3 you always start with “Act 1 (or 3), Scene:
”. Here you leave it out. May be optional, but you may want to be consistent