ToddHW wrote: ↑
December 12th, 2018, 2:31 pm
Even though you'l be listening out of order (since Acts 1 and 2 aren't ready yet), I think the act works well enough standalone to not be confusing. In fact, you could probably get away with Act 3 as a one act play. What happens before Act 3 is not crucial, and what happens in Pinero's act 4 is but one of a number of possibilities that could happen after this....
you're so right, Todd, this could have been a stand-alone, most of the previous plot is revealed through the discussions, so people would understand the situation even if they only heard this act. And I don't mind listening out of order anyway.
This is a grand act, everybody was playing their roles to perfection and it's skillfully assembled.
Great job and looking forward to the rest.
I would only suggest (you knew I would
) a few cuttings for the stage directions, in places where they are not needed and where I think the pacing of the dialogue should not be interrupted, to make it more fluent:
> at 6:37
: “Avonia, shrilly” – Leanne is shrill enough in her reply and it makes the dialogue pace smoother
> at 8:19
: “Drawing a long breath” – Tomas gives us a nice long breath here
> at 8:35
: “Tom, testily” - it would flow better without interruption
> at 30:33
: “Tom, quietly”
> at 50:08
: “Imogen, shrilly”
> at 54:41
: “Imogen, shrilly” – this definitely needs to be cut, so the "No – No - Yes!" comes as rapid-fire for perfect comedic effect
As always, they're only suggestions